Explosion in the second paragraph should say expulsion. A man like this doesn't give off the air of speaking Japanese. I believe that a little more background with Mr. Richard and Panama X needs to be given before they are put face to face. The rest of the story is well written and very good. I do think however that the contract should be a little more explained. This is a good work and I do hope you will add more soon. This Panama X has captured my attention.

compliment and went pack to unpacking. back to unpacking. This story just keeps getting weirder and weirder. I would have liked to have seen a bit more of the courtroom and alittle less of Filthy's personality. Especially the food. However i will continue to read the story as it is put up. Hopefully more indepth chapters will be posted and we will learn everything there is to know about Byron.

HEY! I'm 16 that's not very fair. I know I believe that I have no talent but you don't have to put it so bluntly right here for everyone to see.

I actually enjoyed this. This was very entertaining. I would like to see more small but fun things like this on urbis.

I wish I could have given you a higher talent rating. This piece was so well put together. I enjoyed it from beginning to end and hope that i will be able to read more by you soon.

This was pretty good, but i found a little bit of a hard time really getting what it was about. I would love to know if there is a story behind the lyrics it might make it easier to understand for me. Overall though I believe this could do well with a bit more clarity.

This song spoke to my soul. It makes you think and try to put your life in perspective. I hope to read more things like this by you in the future.

There was nothing about this poem that I didn't enjoy. Every word had me paying the utmost of attention to what was comming next. I thought alot about someone i lost and this almost made me cry. I appreciate this piece more than alot of pieces i have ever read. I am dying to see mroe pieces like this, I wish you good luck i making more pieces for people to enjoy.

I actually really liked this. It was short straight and to the point. That's just the way a lot of writing should be.

This is a good start to a story, it is engaging and will make a few people recall having done the same thing in the main character losing her wallet and a kind person helping them out. I think if you continue on this route your story will turn out just fine.