This was almost like a string of thought...I like that there is little dialouge; usually I wouldn't but it works with this. It was very interesting and the scene was vivid. Nice job...The characters need a name though ;)

Nice imagery and nicely written. This created a very vivid image in my mind. I think it could use a few more lines...you could elaborate a little more. But this was god and I really liked reading it.

Very short but I managed to overlook that and see it as a well written piece with a very natural and smooth progression...nice job...I would have liked to see a few more lines, and a tip for next time: Write it in a lyrical form and it will flow much better.

As the story opened, I really had to force myself to read it because it really wasnt different from other things I have read, but as the story progressed, I really liked it. Really compelling characters and a nice plot. So with that said, the only thing I have for a tip: Always be sure to catch people's attention with the opening scene...I think that is the most important thing.

Very good lyrics with nice wording. Im not a fan of screamo music and I would hope that these lyrics would not be sung like that as I think it would ruin it...but that's just me. Nice job!

I think that it's brilliant that you personify Insomnia and call it "her". And I think it can actually be interpreted in many ways...depending on the reader. But I really liked this...nice job!

I think this is a very profound quote. I thought about many things when I read this..could be talking about a drug or it could be talking about something like sex. It all depends of what the reader is feeling and how they relate to it. I liked this alot and it is very true!

Very nice depth and for some reason it reminded me of a flyleaf song...I dont know where that came from...but nice job!

Extremely well written and I think everyone can appreciate this for what it is. I really like how you broke apart "Perfect" and "moments" by describing them seperately.

I am sure this rings true for many people and many people will probably relate to this quote as it grasps a very deep and emotional meaning in a short little sentence. The only thing I had an issue with was, it didn't really have a "ring" to it...meaning iam not sure anyone would remember this after they closed out of it even thought is still very nicely said.