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AGE: 26
LOC: United Kingdom
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: August 19

My Name is Jasmine Richards. I was born in North London in 1983. My work has recently appeared in Fire, Keystone and The Black Rose poetry magazines.
   I continue to submit my work to poetry magazines. However, I am very interested in the possibility of publishing a booklet or poetry collection.
  I am here to have my work reviewed and to network with other poets and publishers

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Poetry / Knees
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Knees This is not you. I do not know you, the way my body knows you: Pulls to you, lurches, absconds, leaving me hollow and burning. This is not you. I do not know you, the way I know my knees: Every crack and line, every scar, bruise and scrape. An odd bump, inexplicable: My recollections buried deep within it. These things are the way I know the difference: Left from Right. Love from Lust. But this: This is not you. I do not know you, the way you seem to know yourself: Your sharp wit cut...
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The Dark Side of the Sun Yes. I live here now. Adjusting, perilously on this bright - barren plane. It is life blind - Sparking. Flaring. Furiously disjointed and seeking. It is death - an empty nothing- a bag of seashells: - Clattering. Cast out: - scattered along the shore. Crushed by the lightest of your touches. Naked. Bare. Boney delicate - incomplete - You should have been an elephant: All grey scale - bright eyes- keen ears:- I would have known you then. I am transfixed in the warm gl...
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Poetry / My Nadja
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My Nadja I dreamed- fantasising- The hard flash of green Glimpsed through solid doors. The brush of static. Pulsing- not touching- but grazing - I forced that into being- Through veins - deep and crooked. This morning was science fiction: Knowing you were there before looking - I made of you an idol for my love: Casting beautiful shadows against cold stone. You were my Nadja. Struck by your eyes: corrupted and wanting I was dancing - Intoxicated- with your spirit, I dressed for church In tha...
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Poetry / Chain Link
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Chain-Link Here sits the mirror of me. I Know You. Stop.think-wish-plead-praying things could have been different. We Are Chain-Link. turned- twisted-unyielding. It is desolation.love-hate-anger-pain-physical/emotional-bound in blood and dust. There is no difference today. You don’t understand:-I never wanted you clean. Only you. Carbon sour-dirt sweet sweat- bone bane and flesh. There will be no bottled green-imperfect day. We Are only/all human-stuck on play-no skip frame-rewind-fast...
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Poetry / It
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It I buried it in my sleep: In the bright black earth of in-between. Amongst the sizzle pop of white noise …(I still dream)… …You will never find it. I thought of your stories: All your travels beyond the mole hill grass. Then, there was nowhere to hide It. You had been …(I saw you)…everywhere It soared with your voice. In my eyes It glistened. …… An aberration… In the blue canvas half-light. We stretched out like schoolgirls: Buried o...
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Poetry / ANSWER ME!
just great, mystical alive and some really haunting imagery. what i get from the poem is they desperate desire for answers and an overwhelming need to know why, thanks for sharing
I love where this is coming from, and there are moments of clarity and beauty in it. However, i feel that this is a very personal poem that might struggle to speak to universal experiance and engage your readers. perhaps you could try to alter it to be less specigic, we know the story of your love and perhaps loss but i want to know more about how that felt. the structure is nice but does't quite match the narrative quality. you cold try rearranging it into a stream of consciousness or tighte...
Short Story / N ME
Really interesting start. the style at the begining i love. the poetic language is stunning but then you loose it a little toward the end. try maintaing that style. the piece is internal so lets hear more of the character's internal monologue. keep going with it.
Poetry / Bouquet
I love the word play in this, its so much fun. I was wondering how much attention you have played with flower symbolism in this piece, many of the thoughts you are conveying seem to match the symbolism of the flowers, and then other lines don't. Is the juxtaposition intentional? If not you could increase the symbolic significance by matching flower meanings to convey feeling more directly in their symbol. the structure is good. don't change it too much!
Novel Treatments / God Made Me Ugly
this is really promisng, keep going with it, and make sure you check the grammar and spelling before posting, i found a few errors. I love the ideaand you execute it well. Your use of colloquial terms and profanity could work really well, but at times we get a little overwhelmed with it and forget what the story is about. choose the points at which you use it more carefully for maximum effect. Try juxtaposing it against a more gentle flowing sentance. Playing with opposites can work really we...
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