Janisa stays in the car; her dried up tears caked on her eyes. She’s not much of a crier but under the circumstances Devian understands. He looks at Janisa trying to be strong. He knows she’s been holding those tears in as long as he could. He didn’t understand why she was doing that; it couldn’t have been for his sake, he’s seen her break down before. Devian silently sighs in relief. “It’s about time”, he says to himself. Time nods its head. Devian steps out of the car and takes a long look...
Til Death Do We Part… Are We Dead Yet? A play by Eric Cook Act I scene i: inside wedding chapel, down by the altar. Jay R., Raquel & Rev standing there Raquel: You all right? Jay R.: Yea…I’m good it’s just…wow…I’ve just waited so long for this to happen. I can’t believe it’s finally here. You’re actually here…for me Raquel: But you’re here for me too, right? This is a two-way street isn’t it? Jay R.: Oh, no doubt no doubt. But still…I just never though this day would come… Raquel: But we talk...
It's a good story, very engaging, but as I'm reading it I don't feel like I'm reading a book I feel like I'm reading a screenplay. I noticed there was trend to how you wrote starting with a long dialogue between characters and then a paragraph of exposition. The exposition needs to be weaved in and throughout the dialogue better. Without getting too techincal I thought this story was very enjoyable I just didn't know where you were leading me. This is a mild criticism however because based on...
I'm going to be upfront with you: I laughed so hard throughout this etire play my stomach aches. I don't say this to be cruel but I strongly suggest you take my words into consideration because my laughter should be an indication that your original idea for this play is lost on the audience. In Regard to Stage Cues and notes: "Typical looking" is not a description a costume designer would appreciate because it's too vague. The stage cues were entirely too in-depth because the director is not ...