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Version 1
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Her lips slid crookedly across perfect shatterproof teeth as she clutched my root in a biodegradable hand, the other tracing along my prosthetic perineum. Servos whirred in tune with our pelvic writhing, partially obscuring the hum and grind of the panopticon of webcams crusted to the blank white walls, squinting and zooming in medical-grade fluorescent lighting. In spite of the sterile room, her eyes, twin black lenses adrift in seminal globes were wide in her tanned synthetic flesh, set apa...
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"I was born, then I went to Kindergarten, then I fucked some crazy slut on the back of my father's corpse. Her blood was composed of a single monosyllabic element, and that's how I got my super powers." Deep in the thick ropy string-theory wet dreams of my skull, a voice whispers, lost amid the squalls of narrative: A summary of a life story that structurally replicates itself across reams of word and picture. The omissions are always the same: there's always something between the lines, but ...
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Version 1
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When someone tells you their life story, their lips curl back from their teeth and they murmur, "I was born, then I went to Kindergarten, then I fucked some crazy slut on the back of my father's corpse. Her name was Walter Benjamin and her blood was composed of a single monosyllabic element. That's how I got my super powers." There's always something else happening between the lines, but it’s cut from the story. Me, I'm going to tell you the unabridged version of my life story: I was born at ...
Version 1
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Donald’s Livejournal (A blog ensconced in World of Warcraft, and unrequited love.) (A letter – written after a party this past weekend.) March 01, 20XX Debbie, I don’t care what they say about you, I think you’re amazing. Every time I see you in that slinky dress and see you get up from the chair so your French cut pantyline shows through, cupping your heart-shaped ass, I can’t help but reminisce about John’s Birthday party, when you put on that rubber nurse’s uniform and the black hooker boo...
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Haiku/Senryu / Stain
I really liked this. I find a lot of haiku work sometimes a bit too esoteric. I still like it, but it's sometimes difficult to connect with. This one, though, definitely hit home. Furthermore, it doesn't deviate from the nature imagery and juxtaposed colours I've come to expect from the genre.
Short Story / Unfinished symphony
It looks like a good start. I'm enjoying the style, but I tend to go in for some overwrought metaphors. That said, keep an eye on syntax and agreements while you're doing it. For example: "the staircase full to the brim of trepidation." - are you saying trepidation is a container that can be filled with a staircase? Or that the staircase is filled to the brim with trepidation? And if it's the second one, it's a mixed metaphor since staircases don't really have brims. (Maybe rims, in the form ...
Short Story / The Nunnery
The conversation between the narrator and Id worked out fairly well, which is a huge bonus, as most interior "dialogues" tend to come across as somewhat contrived. However, the prose itself seems awkward in a lot of places. The opening paragraph works as a quick example, but the succeeding paragraph suffers from a similar re-hash of the same ideas. Especially if you're looking for a publisher, I'd suggest tightening up the descriptions/jokes a bit more, rather than leading the reader directly...
Short Story / STATIC
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You're right in your notes, there. I'm not sure where I'd slot this one, either. At most, I'd say it slides more into the prose-poetry setting than a short narrative or anything other than that. I like the alliterative language, the imagery, too. Not so sure about the title and how it fits in with the images laid out here, though. "A Scholarly Essay Upon the Craft of Writing" rings vaguely false (often because scholarly essays aren't often so reflexive that they need to refer to themselves as...
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