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Polemic deconstructionism faze will me not **Possible typo..or left for confusion? I will definetely say, this poem is one of the most interesting I've read so far! (in other words-well done!) I have a hard time through it because the setting keeps changing. Maybe I just need to re-read it a few more times.

hehe This was awesome! Way to be creative and utilize your skills ! I love the message too.

This is not original. This same type of poem has been around over a century. Add something that makes it your own. Personalize it.! It is well written, it just looks like you've gotten in a "set mind" while possibly reading the old books and watching the old movies. I have been there before. Make it yours! Find something inside you to express and bring it to life! :)

hehe this is great! Work on the punctuation(I am learning this myself as well...) I can't tell where a sentence (or complete thought)begins and ends.. Above all-the content is awesome! I love this poem!!

To your young one needs. Maybe a typo here.. feeling blue normally agrees with feeling sad and gloomy...however this person is sick..maybe you could try a different word..or keep it;) either way..lol One day I will be,better typo here maybe.. Try not to use BUT at the beginning so much...work on creating more imagery.. It seems, you may not be finished with the poem, like you wanted to write more and didn't have time... I do like where it is going:) As for the actual content and what you are ...