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AGE:
38
LOC: Italy
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: September 23
LOC: Italy
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: September 23
What more is there to say? I’m an aspiring writer who wants to see her dream come to fruition – and now I have the confidence to see it through, at last.
In the meantime, I’ve found myself living in a country I never dreamed I’d see, married to the man I never dreamed I’d meet, and living a life I’d never even imagined, all thanks to a novel I wrote but haven’t published yet.
Truth is stranger than fiction, indeed.
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Chapter Two "Rats" "I want to impress upon you the importance of good behaviour, Lit- I mean, Burke," Uncle Reginald said, and Burke pulled his gaze away from the traffic on the motorway to look at the reflection of his uncle's eyes in the rear-view mirror. "It is absolutely imperative that you behave and do as you're told. This is going to be a terrific imposition on your Aunt Hazel and myself, so you're going to have to just make do with certain…situations, for a while." Burke said nothing,...
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_Her face was vibrant, her eyes bright, and she glowed with happiness in a way he'd always remember. They sat on the swing set in the park, the sun shining warm on their shoulders, the sky a brilliant blue. Everything seemed to glow with an almost ethereal light, even the dull metal chains of the swings, but she shone most lovely of all._ _He felt warm and safe, content to be at her side in the fresh air and the sunshine. He pulled back on the swing chains and rocked, and the swing carried h...
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"Lo Sciopero – The Strike" _The more you want something, the slower it is in arriving; evidently, this includes Italian trains,_ Emily thought. She glanced around at the other pre-dawn travelers and then down the length of track visible from the platform. There was movement that _might_ be the train ambling slowly along the track toward them, but it was difficult to be sure in the heavy fog that befell Rovigo – and the rest of the Veneto – in early February. She stamped her feet and rubbed h...
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p=. _Lo Sciopero_- The Strike p<>. She fussed with her jacket for a few minutes before she resigned herself to simply leaving it unbuttoned. She had put her suitcase to one side of the aisle and was keeping an eye on it; at the same time she could still sense him occasionally watching her. The sun hadn't yet risen, and the heat on the carriage of the train was intermittent at first; she shivered for a while before it became uncomfortably warm. She took out a magazine to while away some ...
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Well, you got my attention and made me laugh. What more could we want from a piece?
What can I say - I still love these pieces! I'm never sure, though, if this sort of thing is meant to be a pun, or not: "Today, rushing _straight_ from work, I didn’t have time to change into what Davie calls my gayer clothes." At any rate, I feel a joke lurks in there, but I'm just not confident about how to bring it out... All of the "sinewy" repetitions (and the variants of same) actually wore a little thin, for me. Or perhaps the problem is that I kept reading the variations and thinking,...
One change I can propose is that you say "I wonder, is this body, my body, really just...". Another change would be to say "*a* vulgar metaphor" instead of "the vulgar metaphor". Otherwise, it seems like you are implying that your body is "the be-all end-all metaphor of metaphors", as opposed to one of countless others. This would also tie in better with "a grotesque caricature". I think the end line is solid and strong, and witty, as well. A fine concept, well done.
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