"The only thing we have to fear is fear itself." -- Franklin D. Roosevelt. As far as I know, you are not plagiarizing. Nice quote. It gives one a lot to think about.

You're right. This is only a beginning, but it is a good start. Hmm, you seem to have a tendency to throw around extra commas. Otherwise, your punctuation is sound. As for capitalization, I only stress that a poet should capitalize the first letter of each line. It looks more formal that way. Your imagery, however, is wonderful. It's rather like a sidewalk. Each image is a square unlike the one before or the one after that leads you onward. At the end of ea

Ha ha. I like your "Notes For the Reviewer." Nice touch. As for your actual entry, I find it entertaining. It definitely puts a spin on the "bigger picture" we all seek to capture and understand. You have a unique point of view, and I like that. In this writing, you seem to put a comic flair on your genuine, sincere search for understanding. Your punctuation is perfect, for the most part. (Contact me for the particulars.) Your grammar is exceptional, and you seem to have mastered capitalizati...

The problem with "Untitled" 's is that they always end up needing a title in the end... For having been written after an argument, this poem is surprisingly full of philosophy and is perhaps somewhat lacking in emotion. That is unexpected, but it is not wrong. I believe it gives the poem a thoughtful, distant, melancholy tone, which is feasible. You have a few minor errors, and I have a few suggestions: line 1 - "You ask where it comes from, how it started," (lowercase "h") line 3 - "It does ...

I'm diggin' the mention of U2, but I love rock music, so I guess that's a given. How old is this piece, actually? The date would change the connotation of "this fall." Beware of that. This seems to be randomly arranged, which makes sense, because it is a journal, and our stream of consciousness has a tendency to swerve all over the road. I would call your style of narration brief yet entertaining. For some reason, it reminds me of an audio journal documenting a military mission. Whatever. I d...

Wow, this is strange, and pointless, it would appear. Except for a faint humanitarian intent, (by which I mean the possible protection and / or salvation of untold millions' self-esteems), this is totally bogus. Oh, and by the way, "Internet Overlord Quanta Zorgod" is reeking with nerdiness. Your "announcement" is merely reverse unwritten law. I'm sorry, I see no true value in this writing. If this is the end you hoped to achieve, congrats. If not, try again.

Wow. This a highly emotional piece. Full of action, it traces a drowning mind through a realistic sequence using the voice of a surprisingly sober narrator. Personally, I felt it. I got totally into it, which means that you really did your job as an author. Congratulations. I will be looking forward to more from you in the future. In hindsight, I was so distracted by the storyline -- as I should be -- that I did not even look at the technical aspects. Let's start with punctuation. Ooh, commas...

Wow, this is a lot to take in in one sitting, but I'll try. Your poem is more like a novel. It's very detailed, very precise, and it's characters are well-defined. You seem to have a ghastly lack of punctuation, or, at least, you have a number of missing periods. I have a few specific errors I would like to point out: beat-up, old car its’ image rolling >>> The apostrophe is unnecessary. just inch deep >>> Try sticking an "an" in there. A smell that’ll catalyst... >>&g...

I admit that, at my age, I am not very familiar with query letters. I would, however, like to offer a few grammatical suggestions: First off, should "Federal Detective" be capitalized? Also, could you rephrase "collision path?" It disrupts the flow of thought and is ... shall we say, distastefully worded? "...how far a man who will go..." Remove the "who." Technically, it should be "his life, the life of his fiancée and the life of their unborn child." (I know it's cumbersome.) Throughout the...