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LOC: Jennings, LA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: July 23
LOC: Jennings, LA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: July 23
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The age-old question: Is the glass half-empty or half-full?
Answer: Both and neither, depending on how the glass is being viewed. The glass is half-empty AND half-full, assuming that is undeniably “half.” For and analogy, when a persons squats, is that person sitting or standing? Hmm… hard to tell (without drifting off into the technicalities of the definitions of the two positions). Now as to neither, a state of perfect neutrality is extremely difficult to maintain. Therefore, if even one particle becomes out of place, the contents of the glass lose their “half” status. Also, no glass is ever truly “full.” This is because every atom is mostly empty space, which puts “half-full” out of the question. Neither is any glas…
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The Suburban Hitler and Those That Weathered the Storm, Based on a True Story, Chapter 1: The War...
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Chapter 1: The Warning Signs I should have seen it coming. It was obvious from the start. “Heed the warning signs,” they say, but few people ever do. As black clouds gathered on the far horizon, I was too entranced by my own preoccupations to notice the atmospheric goings-on. It came all of the sudden, or so it would seem. “ ’Tis easy to see; hard to foresee.” Now, the hurricane is unleashing its full ferocity, maximum velocity, upon the world below. Nothing can reverse the past, but anything...
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When enclosing our property, There was one minor dent: We’d forgotten about The tree by the fence. ‘Twas an oak – nothing special, No facets divine – Who so grieved at out mistake, Yet we knew not for some time. Oh, how he shook his branches like fists in the wind, Threatening to fall on our house or near it, An his blood boiled in frustration, And he screamed, and he sobbed And looked out with the face of a gathering mob. He begged, and he pleaded and consulted his God, Yet nothing availed. ...
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By my parents’ definition, I should not exist. Just like some chemicals cannot come into contact without causing an explosion, some personality traits simply don’t mix. According to my parents, I have conflicting interests. I have chosen both A and B, and now I must choose between the two, they say. I made my choice long ago, and I’m sticking to it. I choose the middle road, the road not taken, the path unmade, the outskirts. I am a true Child of the Twilight. In today’s society, it’s hard t...
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I am unworthy. I want your eternity, But I can't say, "Hello." I'd end my own misery, But I just can't let go (pause) Of you. Unworthy. Your aura, your prestige, your foreign policy. I want it all, but I just can't believe You'll say, "Yes." Unworthy. Reach out. Pull back. My heart rains jet black. Your love runs down my wrist. My thoughts are much amiss. I want your eyes, your devotion, your kiss, But I'm unworthy. Unworthy. Unworthy. (verse 2) Uneven breaths, staggered steps, and pulsing ve...
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(verse 1) You say I'm ungrateful. Label me distasteful. A child, so hateful. Like Romeo, fate's fool Drowning in stagnant pools Of thought, caught in the lies And bitter inside. Tough love. (verse 2) Headache. Heartache. Always something. The sun smiles injurously. Brilliant smarting in my eyes, Highlighting the antichrist In my role-playing life. Call me a collage, a montage -- aren't we all? Darkness covers daylight, And I find myself lost in the night. No matter. I'd rather Be there anyway...
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I admit that, at my age, I am not very familiar with query letters. I would, however, like to offer a few grammatical suggestions: First off, should "Federal Detective" be capitalized? Also, could you rephrase "collision path?" It disrupts the flow of thought and is ... shall we say, distastefully worded? "...how far a man who will go..." Remove the "who." Technically, it should be "his life, the life of his fiancée and the life of their unborn child." (I know it's cumbersome.) Throughout the...
Wow, this is a lot to take in in one sitting, but I'll try. Your poem is more like a novel. It's very detailed, very precise, and it's characters are well-defined. You seem to have a ghastly lack of punctuation, or, at least, you have a number of missing periods. I have a few specific errors I would like to point out: beat-up, old car its’ image rolling >>> The apostrophe is unnecessary. just inch deep >>> Try sticking an "an" in there. A smell that’ll catalyst... >>&g...
Wow. This a highly emotional piece. Full of action, it traces a drowning mind through a realistic sequence using the voice of a surprisingly sober narrator. Personally, I felt it. I got totally into it, which means that you really did your job as an author. Congratulations. I will be looking forward to more from you in the future. In hindsight, I was so distracted by the storyline -- as I should be -- that I did not even look at the technical aspects. Let's start with punctuation. Ooh, commas...
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