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AGE:
36
LOC: United States
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: November 18
LOC: United States
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: November 18
Hello, I am a 30 something teacher from So Cal who now lives in Arizona. I have been a closet writer for more years than I would like to admit, and have recently been encouraged to share my stories. While I am trying (desparately) to find an agent, I have been encouraged by other authors to find a place to share my works. So … here I am. :) I hope you like what you read.
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Chapter 1 The night air was cold against my hot, sweaty skin. My clothes felt sticky and damp, and smelled of cigarettes, pot, body odor, and blood. The throbbing ache in my cheek was slowly dimming and I could feel tightness in my right eye and knew it was swelling. I prayed silently that my sight would hold long enough for me to get into a room. There were few lights outside the dark window and I wondered if the driver was taking me where I wanted to go. I have no ...
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It seems funny to me now, that I had always thought of Her as perfect. She was the one the only one I wanted to be. Her hair was golden. She was popular, and, of course, very talented. The things that I saw in Her, a child; I just assumed continued into adulthood, queendom. She was perfect, in my eyes, as well as other's, never flawed. But now I can see. Not a model. The perfect face, and skin, and body. Yes. An even, the most desirable. Wendifiable. But not the one that I thought. Life...
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He stands just out of reach Just out of sight. Teasing me, taunting me Calling me with his eyes, his scent Caressing me with his thoughts He glares and smirks I can feel his presence Hunting and haunting I turn to, turning to… Why did I turn? He is not there. He never is. He is here. In my senses, in my mind Under my skin Running through my veins To my heart, and back out Tearing up my body Bring both pleasure and pain. Caring and Tearing Completing and destroying me Leave me, but don&...
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Chapter 1 The night air was cold against my hot, sweaty skin. My clothes felt sticky and damp, and smelled of cigarettes, pot, body odor, and blood. The throbbing ache in my cheek was slowly dimming and I could feel tightness in my right eye and knew it was swelling. I prayed silently that my sight would hold long enough for me to get into a room. There were few lights outside the dark window and I wondered if the driver was taking me where I wanted to go. I have no idea how much time had pa...
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The Family Web By Kathleen Eakins On the day I was born, I was taken from my mother’s bosom and given to a man who stood in the shadows just outside her room. It is said that my cries quieted as he caressed my tiny face. The man in the shadows spoke my name so that it could be written on the birth and death records of both the mother and child that entered the delivery room that day. Two days later, I was take...
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This is very amusing! Kids of all ages will find this story funny. It's got a great moral and an amusing way of getting the point across. It is a little hard to read for those of us down here in the "lower 48" but that adds to the charm of the piece. I would buy it and read it to my 4th graders in a heartbeat.
The ending leaves a little to be desired. Any story that ends with "it was all a dream" is just a little boring. I believe a better ending might have been that she didn't dream her encounter.
This pulled at the emotionals a little. Your vocabulary doesn't leave the ready to know your views, ... whether you are sad by the loss or just going through the motions of paying respect. This allows the reader to play a part in your poem. If that was your intent, well done. If it wasn't, you might want to add more specific words to show your emotional state.
Good Start! It is a topic most people can relate to and I think it has a real commercial hook to it. Depending on which direction you take it, this could be a very scary, or very romantic, story.
I am very interested! I love the idea of someone knowing the mortality of others. It is a fascinating idea. While this first chapter draws the reader in and leaves us wanting more, I think a little more description of what the lines look like, or how the crossing lines appear to Jeremy Cobb, would be a nice element to add. I am definately hooked though and would love to read more.
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