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AGE: 20
LOC: Tempe, AZ
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: November 20

I felt like I should update this. In the name of, well, I don’t know. Update in the name of Thanksgiving! For now, anyway. Everyone go update their profiles in the name of Thanksgiving! And then send me some mail if you did. It would be kind of cool to see who all does this before Thanksgiving.

Anyway, I’m wandering off the point of the profile. As my username indicates, my name is Megan Solari and I like to consider myself a writer. For the next month and a half or so I’m a student at the University of Advancing Technology for Game Design (I adore drawing stuff in Flash. Animating it is another matter. I make things too complicated for my own good). However, come January, I will be a student at the University of Nevada, Reno for Engl…

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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Chapter 9 - Raven Rising
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     It persisted, even after Zephyr had slept and awoken.      “Can't you hear that?” Saavriin asked, peering into the darkness, his brows knit in concentration. The sound was faint, but due to the echoes he couldn't tell how far away it really was.       “Hear what?”       “Your hearing has to be at least as sharp as mine is. You really can't hear it?”   &n...
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Chapter 8 - Raven Rising
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     Zephyr winced and recoiled as a shard of stone sliced into his cheek just below his eye. He was only momentarily dazed, but the warm flow of blood that slipped down his neck and into his jerkin was enough to bring him about. He had to fight back, help Saavriin, but the lizard was huge! He hadn't managed to get a good look at it before, but it was easily the size of some smaller houses in Tellhemport.       And Saavriin was on its back.  &...
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Chapter 7 - Raven Rising
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     Deep, deep darkness. Could Zephyr even see down here? Saavriin doubted it. Without the aid of stars or moon, in this true darkness, Saavriin saw with his true eyes. He didn't see with smell or taste, as a rat might, nor with sound as a bat could, not even heat, like a viper. A simple awareness of his surroundings was granted to him. A man might be able to discern the shape, size, and heft of a cup with his hands without looking directly as the object, and that was how...
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And they all came tumbling down...       Drip drop. Plip plop. The rain outside seemed to be playing, but it didn't serve to improve his mood any. “At least it's raining!” he could hear his grandparents saying. They had survived the Fall. “Maybe we'll have clean water this month.” The words of his parents, teenagers during the Fall. Him? He was a Child of the Fall. He knew the truth of it, or at least he thought he did, but what new generation ...
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And they all came tumbling down...       Drip drop. Plip plop. The rain outside seemed to be playing, but it didn't serve to improve his mood any. “At least it's raining!” he could hear his grandparents saying. They had survived the Fall. “Maybe we'll have clean water this month.” The words of his parents, teenagers during the Fall. Him? He was a Child of the Fall. He knew the truth of it, or at least he thought he did, but what new generation ...
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Poetry / Spoiled
The "dangers of carbs and smoking" line reminded me of something my grandmother used to say. "You see a lot of old smokers, but you don't see a lot of old fat people." Anyway, I'm not entirely sure about the meter in this. The first stanza sets a nice, stable pace, but then the second one breaks it entirely (stanza two, line two seems too long). Stanza three reigns in back in, then you kind of lose it again in the final stanza. I think, perhaps, you should break some of the longer lines down ...
Action Adventure / The Demon Lover Chapter 7
I'm finally getting good at remembering to press the review button before I read. I don't have to wait on the timer anymore! “...Phalangists, meaning “battalions”...” The whole chunk after “Phalangists” doesn't need to be italicized, just the foreign word. “...open (Inshallah).” I'm not entirely sure what this word in parenthesis is or why it's there. Seems out of place. “...from the muther-ship.” I'm just curious about this one. Mothership is a real word. Why the odd spelling? “ I mean, bett...
Short Story / Betty
“...divided by muntin’s shaped...” Muntins rather than muntin's. What you have here is possessive. “...and flowers from a field of daisies...” I'm not entirely sure this fits with the rest of the list the way it's written. At the moment, it's written like the flowers aren't daisies, but a different sort of flower from a field of daisies. I would recommend dropping the “and... of” portion. Saying he smelled daisies mixed with a strange potpourri is sufficient in this case. “So when the chip we...
I, at the same time, appreciate and don't appreciate the length of this poem. There is so much information here that it almost seems as if it would be better suited as a full-blown story. Then again, I realize that you are telling a story that exists (if I read your notes correctly) and that this is a poetic interpretation of the story. Still, on that note, this either needs to be lengthened some or truncated. There are _a ton_ of characters in this poem and for someone such as myself who isn...