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LAST LOGIN: August 19
LAST LOGIN: August 19
I have been writing since I was 13. I couldn’t imagine my life without it. I’ve had some formal training in college, short story writing classes and workshops. I dedicate most of my free time to write.
My day job is a draftsman for an architect, designing residential homes and condos in AutoCAD. A good job, but I’d much rather wake up, write and enjoy the quiet life of a writer full time.
My main focus in writing is science fiction. (particularly the speculative sub-genre not hard science which is more character based) Although I have sometimes dabbled in regular fiction.
While in school I loved reading and reviewing other peoples work, I try to be as helpful as possible. I’ll read just about anything except things that are o…
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Chapter Four: Zhym What is this? Am I dead? Your soul was pure, you have been allowed to join the collective since your molecules have merged with it. Your essence is now inset with the collected body. I don’t understand. In time you will. We are the Zhym. The mass you are now a part of. The body that you have been united with. Your mind is good, we have assimilated your thoughts, passions and memories with ours. Carbon life intrigues us, yet we fear its incompetence. How long will I be like ...
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Written by Eric Gonzales Star Claw: The Spirits of Zhym # “You’re saying you had a confirmed signal from it?” a man in a gray suit asked, walking alongside a man in a white coat as they headed down a hall in a corporate office tower. “Yes, ten seconds strong, it is the third signal this month, still not long enough for us to pinpoint the exact location, but long enough for us to reconfirm it on the network.” The man with a white coat replied. “Its somewhere in the Fringe Worlds sector, past t...
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Written by Eric Gonzales Star Claw: The Spirits of Zhym # “You’re saying you had a confirmed signal from it?” a man in a gray suit asked, walking alongside a man in a white coat as they headed down a hall in a corporate office tower. “Yes, ten seconds strong, it is the third signal this month, still not long enough for us to pinpoint the exact location, but long enough for us to reconfirm it on the network.” The man with a white coat replied. “Its somewhere in the Fringe Worlds sector, past t...
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Written by Eric Gonzales MaxPower1272@yahoo.com STAR CLAW THE SPIRITS OF ZHYM On the edge of the galaxy, he found her, when she needed him most. by Eric Gonzales Prelude: Zhym observes your memories. “What was that?” a corporate soldier asked his patrol partner. They looked off into the distant arid landscape of desolate black volcanic rock and dirty blonde sand. There was an ominous absence of usual high winds on Kilgurith II. “Beats the hell out of me rookie. When do Clover and Burke get on...
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As a comedy this works well. The alien is to "ghetto" or "urban" to be convincing the way the narration comes across. but your character does not display any real convincing evidence that the narrator is an alien beyond being a schizophrenic teenager with angst who may believe he's an alien. The writing itself is okay, but i'd either work on the comedy more or the scifi more, because it seems to be somewhere in the middle.
This story has a very Devil's Advocate feel. It is interesting and flows well however, you'll need to keep up with cutting edge conventions on satanic understanding to breath fresh life into one of the most played on themes in literature. For example: I would stick to using Lucifer as his name instead of satan even when referring to him in the narrators voice. I recommend digging deep and really doing some hard research into the subject, pulling up old-old manuscripts to really find Satan's t...
This piece seems to have a lot more to it. The writing comes across as a little forced, or maybe a dialogue story like that of a generation indian story. Its too vague to really discerne what the plot may be so I cannot give it a thorough review however, your writing flows.
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