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I find the greatest truth of this poem right now in my life for me, is that not to try to be strong, and negate my vulnerability. The line that includes, "...If you're strong, you'll suffer horribly." However, the greatest survival strategy in life is humility, and that lightness of spirit makes us feel weightless in our daily lives. I've experienced both profoundly! I think your poem is fascinating in that it doesn't need to follow convention to be felt most deeply. The longer lines influenc...

I like your style of writing very much in this poem. It is very unique to you how you string images together and use the phraseology you use. It's the best feature of your poem. The images are kind of eerie too, and you evoke the auditory sense as well, which is an accomplishment for poetry. I would add that I found the soft sounds of the words very soothing, but I needed something more that would grab me. I am thinking maybe create a verse or group of words that show any tension the narrator...

The beginning of the poem was much more captivating for it's suspense. The rhyming was very genuine in as far as I could hear the girl talking next to me on the couch. I didn't form too much of an attachment with the young boy. I think his desription, and the developmet of the story was simplistic, but my interest did stay focused on the story. The poetry became too simplistic I think as the story went on. I expected a twist on the simplicity midway, because the deep meaning was fading. I thi...

This sonnet works most beautifully. The word choice I like especially. The words are subtle, yet very familiar and I feel in tune with the woman's feelings even if she's a different age. I love being in touch with her feelings and especially her inseurities. It's odd, but bonding with someone in their insecurities is so powerful! The flow of language and style of speaking is very much like an oridnary man I would know would speak. I like the poem because I feel I know the characters in every ...