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AGE: 31
LOC: Wichita, KS
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: July 08

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Journal, Diary, & Blogging / The Quackonator
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OK BEFORE YOU CAN TRUELY APPRECIATE WHAT I AM ABOUT TO TELL YOU I HAVE TO GIVE YOU A LITTLE BIT OF BACKGROUND INFORMATION. FIRST OF ALL MY DAUGHTER HAS A PET DUCK, YES I DID SAY DUCK, THAT WE HAVE RAISED FROM A LITTLE CHICK NAMED MISSES PEEPERS. THIS DUCK MAY HAVE A BRAIN THE SIZE OF A PEA BUT IT HAS THE PERSONALITY OF A THREE YEAR OLD AND SHE IS VERY LOVED. THIS DAMNED DUCK HAS PERSONALLY BROUGHT ME SO MUCH JOY AND LAUGHTER THAT I CANNOT EVEN BEGIN TO DESCRIBE IT TO YOU BUT PERHAPS AFTER YOU...
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Poetry / A Psalm Of Truth
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A Psalm Of Truth I will tell you the story Of a man Who could heal the sick With a touch of his hand He spent his life Preaching of a place Where if you go there You will know every name and face He was born our savior Lord of all It was he who said… “Together we’ll fall” At a long oaken table He once gathered For a supper made famous By the word of a pastor Along with me Take a step back in time To hear the words once given By this man of mine “All of you are My closest friends But you will ...
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Poetry / Immortal Dreams
I absolutely loved the title of the poem as well as the choice of vocabulary used throughout the piece. I would very much expect to find this piece published in a book of poetry. It was difficult for me to find the specific meter or rythem. I didn't necessarily think that it flowed well but it did make perfect sense to me. I think it would flow a little better if you incorporated a rhyme scheme within the piece but I think the overall message may be lost were you to change anything. I do not ...
I am assuming a 10 is the highest possible ranking...that is what I intended to give you. I thought it was a wonderful and poingnient piece. Very moving indeed. Thank you for sharing it.
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