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AGE:
32
LOC: East Greenbush, NY
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: January 21
LOC: East Greenbush, NY
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: January 21
Once upon a time I wanted to be a lawyer, so I went to law school. I realized that it was something I wanted to be as a child, not an adult. I really only enjoyed writing, so I’m trying my hand at that.
I write short stories and have finished my first novel. There are no guarantees that I will find an agent and a publisher, but I owe it to myself to try. If not, I suppose I could just take a Bar and be a lawyer.
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What is it to be abandoned? Is it simply a desertion or absconding? Is it necessary that it occur during a time of susceptibility or is any moment in time adequate? Must the act be one of cowardice or even be callous in nature? Is malice a prerequisite forethought when one leaves another or is it permissible for such things to occur through acts of fate or happenstance? If I chose to believe in destiny it would have to be said that from the moment we, my siblings and I, were conceived of as ...
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I haven't read your first two submissions, but I was able to get an idea from what I read. I'm not sure how to do italics in Urbis, but I agree that there needs to be a way to showcase the inner monologue. However, it was not too confusing to figure out. I don't know much of Carolyn, which I assume is in the first two submissions, but I do like her daughter and the fact that you've put her at such a pivotal age of curiosity and sexual discovery. The mother's need to make her happy (at the ris...
This was very understandable, even if it wasn't meant to be. I see it as an ode of sorts to those women of privilege who wished for something more or could have been something more but never tried because they weren't trained to. It reminds me a little of something I read. A study on gifted children who are pressured to be strive for their parent's version of success and end angry and embittered adults who lash out in odd and inappropriate way. "winning your freedom only in death." Is it poss...
I am intrigued by characters that are not beautiful and you seem to capture someone very real. The imagery works well. I can see this woman cutting onions with her fat fingers very distinctly. I see her bean bag, her navy costume and I even see her snot. I would like to read more.
This starts out with some great visuals, but then they virtually disappear and don't surface again until the description of Rambo. I do like the name of the character. It shows a complicated soul behind what could be a benign nickname (Nic or Nick) It might be nice to detail what the fiancé looks like. After six years he would have something more than her just being a bitch. There should be something more personal about his anger, especially if she left him for his best friend. I don’t know i...
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