Intresting storyline, however I'm not sure I liked the fact of the whole child insident. But, I'm not the writer. :) Good use of puntuation and grammer however.

Its somewhat hard for me to believe that you havn't been published already, with writing like this, I say you should definatly be going somewhere! As for your goal, I myself believe in the world, but its not hard for myself to make things seem real, to anyone else it might seem hard at times. I seen no problems with grammer, but I'm not huge advocate of correcting, so I'm not very useful in that field, but I do love your story!

I enjoyed this, it was hard for me to figure out whats going on (Having not read the first 8) but I do believe I'll read your others as well! I didn't see any grammatical errors, but I am not pro at spotting them. I enjoyed your use of diolouge, even if I cant spell it. It kept me intrested in the story :) Good work

This is a really good story. Perhaps you could use a little wider range of vocab, but eh, whatever. Good job. XD XD XD XD XD XD XD

Very nice, good control over your grammer and spelling that I could see off the bat. Diologue was wonderful, and the plot was interesting, even for a story that would normally not interest me.

I loved this, it was a little odd to follow for me at first, but after re-reading it the second time, it cleared it up a little, a few things still puzzle me, but the fact that mostly "all" things exist in this universe, highly interesting... As for grammer and spelling, I noticed few problems, maybe a few that was missed but could be fixed with spell check... or my spelling sucks too.. could be that I mispelt a few words myself.

Looks and sounds great! I can't wait to see more on this... for some reason angels really do it for me, I just can never really find a way to work them into my own writings. Someday, however, I will do so!

I'm not a great person to reveiw lyrics, but I could see myself haveing a few lines stuck in my head for sure. One note that I would like to say is how it does seem to have a sense of modesty to it :)

Overall, I enjoyed your short story, however there was some things that caught my attention that did cause me to lower the rateing of what I think would be a great rateing. Constant use of the same adjectives and verbs is something that, to me, really takes away from the story... for example; As I stepped forward to attack he grabbed a hold of my foot and dragged me down with incredible force. Two sentences later; I got up he got up with me and slammed me up against the concrete wall with inc...