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I pretty sure I either started reading this and had a "Stella Moment" as we call it in our house, she's the baby of the family (she's 4 now) and is forever needing something when I am in the middle of something. So I may or may not have left you a review. So I am re-read it for you. Here is what I think... I love the title first and foremost! Second, I think that Mrs. Woods is really a neat character and an interesting way to go about finding these new Bana kids in the making. As far as gramm...

You said "Once upon an autumn," Did ya mean in autum? You said-"Although the Child tried to make the best of his situation, although" try not to use the same word twice so close together. Okay, getting tired of the word "child" maybe find another way to point out to the reader the child without using it so often. "long legs, strong legs"try "long, strong legs" it gets the point across and doesn't tired the reader. "and crawled from the lake and trudged seven miles and collapsed in his bed. An...

When we lit god's body? or when we left god's body? I was confused there. it is a very colorful piece and i found myself enjoying the flow very much. you have an interesting way of looking at man and his flaws. I like it. You did tend to use too many "ands' toward the end, but that can easily be fixed. Otherwise, it wasn't too bad at all:)