Lena17's profile

AGE: 19
LOC: Los Banos, CA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: July 08

Life is a funny one… As new priorities arise, old loves are lost.

Performing has replaced writing in my life.
Tho it is tragic being unable to weave stories and poetry as I used to, I’m slowly accepting it, and embracing performing as my back-up, as well as counting my blessings that I was not alone in this disheartening time: I have the most wonderful, understanding friends one could ask for…^_

Perhaps, someday, I shall be able to write again, with the same passion & fervor I once had. But for now, I am still here, still enjoying this site, and the amazingly talented people I’ve had the opportunity to meet.

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Version 1

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O Fabio...O Fabio... My heart is heavy with pain I still feel the tears, and harsh words in my ears, to pray was merely in vain. I've never known a love like this, nor a tenderness so true... The day you finally chose to leave was the day I had to leave, too... I found myself in a lonely pub, with naught but a bottle and the storm; when out of the shadows came my absolution, a beautiful stranger to keep me warm. He was strong, dark and dangerous, almost frightening...a sinful lie. Yet the pas...

Poetry - Overall

Fun silliness, or silly fun-ness. Your pick.

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ACT ONE: Once upon a time, 1475 W. Robin Landing was a very attractive Louisiana landmark—a quaint little country house right outside of town, it used to hold many farm animals; with cotton fields stretching out as far as the eye could see, it was much like something out of a western dream. Now, it had bred into a nightmare. The fields dried up, and the animals all died from strange diseases, as evil enclosed on the once-blissful little ranch. As the years wore on, children had wandered into ...

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Attract an agent or publisher for first time publishing

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Version 1

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Try to believe that you are more, Try to know you're not alone; Try to see the world through my eyes, And see that I have grown. Try to forget the insults spawned, Try to remember the praise you've earned; Try to find your mistakeful past, And see what I have learned. Try to forget the bottles you've hidden, Try to forget the words he said; Try to remember the life you chose, And the child to life you led. Try to remember I'll love you forever, Try to remember I'll like you for always; Please...

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Publishable - A book of my own writings

Poetry - Overall

Version 1

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So damn annoying, so damn inconsiderate, always loud, always persists-- I love her, of course, but not like this. I wish she would learn some damn respect, I wish she would notice her damn reflection: She's made so many damn mistakes, so many flaws, so many fakes. She doesn't really seem to try, But only see her mistakes and cry. She seems to drink more and more, Never stopping, never sure-- Of what she has in front of her, Of the life she to live, of the time she has been given. If only she'...

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Publishable - A book of my own writings

Poetry - Overall

Version 1

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Never heard, hardly seen. I have to run, I have to scream. I feel so small, and so frustrated. I feel alone, life's complicated. They just don't see what's deep inside. I'm merely standing when they think I'm hiding. Being small means anger, being small means hate. Coming from a short family, smallness is my fate. There are moments I enjoy, for it's a small world after all. Yet, lots of times I wish that I were just a little taller!

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Publishable - A book of my own writings

Poetry - Overall

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by Andrew_Tortora

This was quite powerful for being so short. I can tell you put a lot of effort into it; you should be proud. It is wonderful. I love the abstractness of it, and yet, the simplicity. You created a whole microcosm of a world, in several stanzas, and I was captured for every word. Keep writing, and I look forward to reading more. ~J

by ambi31183

Overall, this was good. I did not particularly like how all the words ran together in one stanza, that can get a bit annoying in writing (epecially in poetry). Try to keep things spaced, even when a stanza is relatively short. I'm guessing you were referring to Eve of Paradise, in the first week of humankind, yes? An interesting choice (I especially liked your Author's Note at the top; damn right, women shall reclaim their place in the world! lol!) Once again, overall, nice job; just remember...

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