I write my reviews kind of oddly.I hope you don't mind it. I write down comments while I'm reading it, sor of giving you a play-by-play: -The first thing that pops out at me is the grammar (ha! I'm one to talk, right?), basically it just needs some capitalization at the start of all the sentences. -It's very visual, that's good. -Lotta detail. -Hmm, it was an odd choice to write it in the present tense. It's okay, it's just that were used to hearing things like "Vincent sat quietly" not "Vinc...

I review things a bit oddly. I tend to make notes while I write in order to sort of give you a play-by-play of what the reader is thinking: -sun shouldn't be capitalized. -maybe a little more description of the scenery would work well -should be "knew" not "know" -good tone of the story. very warm and whatnot -mediocre twist ending, not necessarily in synch with the rest of the story, you may want to change that. All and all, it's a very pleasant story, although the ending seemed a bit out of...

I review things a bit oddly. I tend to make notes while I write in order to sort of give you a play-by-play of what the reader is thinking: -I agree that it's a little dark, but it doesn't seem too bad yet to frighten away the young ones, that's good. And the mood being set nicely, also good. -Ouch, that "Levitae" bit seems a bit too Harry Potterish. I mean, that's a great series, but there should never be too big of a similarity between works. -Yeah, it's sounding even more Harry Potterish. ...

Very well done. While I would not classify it as "humor/satire" it is very good for a six word story. These are very difficult to write, and I think you were able to articulate a story, or at least a situation very well.

I review things a bit oddly. I tend to make notes while I write in order to sort of give you a play-by-play of what the reader is thinking: -First sentence is a bit convoluted and hard to understand. Maybe if you split it into two sentences, yeah? -Oh, I like it. -I swear, this is the first flash fiction I've seen that isn't a bunch of goddamn nonsensical long words strung together in an attemp to sound deep. THANK GOD! -Very mysterious, but a bit scary. Could use a bit more tension, I think....

I review things a bit oddly. I tend to make notes while I write in order to sort of give you a play-by-play of what the reader is thinking: -Good opening. -The sentence that starts "At least the brownish..." is a bit confusing to me. How does it apply to the story? -No. Poor ending. I know you were going for a surprising twist, but it seems a unprepared for and pointless as it currently stands. -Also, you introduce all sorts of species and settings when you have so little time. When you only ...

I review things a bit oddly. I tend to make notes while I write in order to sort of give you a play-by-play of what the reader is thinking: -Forgot a space between "listened,I never" in the second sentence. -Wrong usage of a comma between "rude by, cutting." -Sounds like some manner of psychiatrist/patient relationship. However, it's not very clear. You may want to do something about that. -The last bit was very well done. You know: the suicide and the stopping in mid-sentence. All and all, a...

I'm not a big fan of this. Seems a little too artsy and shit for me. Sorry, I'm not trying to be rude or anything. It just doesn't make sense to me.

Very good. You didn't use any colons or semi-colons like a lot of the other six-word-stories. And it feels light and easy to understand. Also sounds very personal. Anywho, very good piece.