LJ85's profile
AGE:
23
LOC: United Kingdom
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: January 01
LOC: United Kingdom
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: January 01
I’m 22 years old and I’m from the UK. I was an English Undergraduate student, but when my mother passed away I didn’t feel that I could go back to my studies there.
I love writing, particularly stage plays, short stories and poetry. A lot of my work can come across to some as quite depressing, but hopefully I don’t use that emotion un-necessarily!
I look forward to reading future reviews of my work – thank you in advance!
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Version 2
6 Reviews
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You want me alone Such terror engulfs my soul How will I escape?
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Version 1
12 Reviews
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You want me alone Terror engulfs my soul How will I escape?
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Version 1
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Reaching, Deep into my soul, Anger, permeating my being, My very existence, Questionable. The answers, are vague. My heart is torn, Ripped into thousands of fragments Floating. The earth spins, Time moves, Rooted I stand, Still. Nothing changes, The same excuses and lies, Pouring from my lovers lips, Fraud. Will no one ever love me, For who I truly am, What I want to be, not Alone. I want a lovers touch, The tenderness, and warmth, Truth, innocence Eternally. But this does not happen, And so ...
Version 1
17 Reviews
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It is cold in here In this room. Where am I? I feel nothing, My heart beats But I am not alive. When did I die? I do not remember, You can feel my pulse As strong as ever, Yet I am not there My soul is gone. Fled from this torture, To a distant land. A land of peace and Tranquility. No one has noticed To them I remain, But I know the truth, I am not me anymore. It is warm in here Away from the cold Away from the dark I am not alone anymore, I long for my time to come, When I can pass on To th...
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This is an excellent quote, profound, and completely true. No matter how much you try to help someone if your motives are not completely pure then you are not helping them at all - deep down you would be doing something for your own gain, whatever that might be, for love, admiration, or financial gain. This is a fantastic example of something that is so straight forward, and yet, when put into words can have a deep impact. I really like this, I look forward to reading more quotes of yours.
I really did enjoy this piece, I thought that it was witty and also helpful (I didn't realise you could refund unhelpful reviews, excellent!) I do also agree with all that you said about spell checking and double checking work, it is very irritating when people insist on writing a long piece with the most important and regularly used word spelled incorrectly! Thank you for brightening my long day at work!
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I can see where this poem is heading, although I felt that it is too filled with angst as apposed to actual pain, I think the structure is too flighty, and needs to be re addressed in order to really get the sense of closure across to the reader. I like the stanza; "I wish I could open the Doors to my life and Live it again With no regret" So it is clear that this poem is not without promise, and I would love to read a second draft! This is obviously just my opinion, but I think it would need...
I too had a lump in my throat just reading that - it kind of hit a chord with me as I used to be an Opera singer, but two years ago I ripped a vocal chord, and my voice has never been the same since. I really feel for her, and don't give up on the auditions, just work harder and harder each day and one day you will think "what was I so afraid of". Don't give up, you can do it!
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