Very well-written... made me think. I like your choice of verbiage here in this piece. Thank you for sharing and I look forward to reading more soon.

Hmmm... you sure do have the ability to write a piece that has me hungry for more. The choice of words in this piece, placed perfectly together, has created an emotional piece that penetrated my soul and left me re-reading it again. Deep, dark, mysteriously flows into a tranquil of powerful sensations that make my eyes squint and my mind pondering... I want more. Great read! Thanks!

I read the entire 4 pages and I think your story line, where you want to go with it, is interesting. I think that you have a creative mind enough to come up with a fantastic story; however, you definitely need to work on the grammar and clean it up, polish it. I am not a pro, and I'm definitely not some reviewer who drops a bomb on the author, but I feel that in this piece in order for you to get a grip on the handle you're hoping to find, I have to be honest with you. It's tricky to put emot...

At first I was thrown back, but in the end, I was nodding my head in approval. I've never read a piece just like this and found it interesting. Thank you.

Blessings!! Nice and interesting! Left me smiling, thanks! Keep up the good work.

This was quite cute! I found myself smiling in the middle and chuckling in the end. You definitely have talent and I see great potential in this piece. Keep up the great work and hope to see more of your work.

I can see this being published as you state in your author's notes and I enjoyed reading this piece. The wording, verbiage and the flow are perfect! I don't see any reason to change any of those aspects. However, I did find to small errors, that you probably over looked or have already caught and corrected. 1) First page, second paragraph - "Hills and in Sherwood and I realized my work here is..." there's one too many spaces between I and realized ... my work. 2) Third page, mid-section. Prin...

I truly enjoy reading material such as this, for it makes you think outside the box, if you will. I appreciate the mental stimulation that this piece offers. Shedding one's skin and molding one's self is definitely a transition that the conscious doesn't seem to take foot notes on, leaving us experiencing a new revival more than not and gives us the perseverance to live in the moment. Thank you for this and I hope I wasn't off base here. I look forward to reading more of your work. ~Kristin~

I like where you went with this piece, I see potential. However, there are a couple of grammatical errors. 1) 4th stanza, 3 line = [seak] should be [seek]. 2) 5th stanza 3rd line, [Theres] should be revised to [there are] or a different word all together. The words in this are soothing and I await to see where you go with this piece in the final end. Keep up the good work. ~Kristin~