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AGE: 24
LOC: United States
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: January 06

I find myself particularly clever.

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Short Story / Triad
Version 2
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I. my fingers left me today. i suppose they had gotten fed up with my antics. they never did explain properly. it was this morning when they jumped off my hands. they looked like miniature sausages, and i briefly entertained the notion of eating them. but i am not a cannibal. i went into the kitchen where my wife was cooking pancakes. she said, "good morning, dear," and pecked me on the cheek. she has always looked like a bird. i said "good morning" back. and then i inform...
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Short Story / Triad
Version 1
5 Reviews   10 Comments
I. my fingers left me today. i suppose they had gotten fed up with my antics. they never did explain properly. it was this morning when they jumped off my hands. they looked like miniature sausages, and i briefly entertained the notion of eating them. but i am not a cannibal. i went into the kitchen where my wife was cooking pancakes. she said, "good morning, dear," and pecked me on the cheek. she has always looked like a bird. i said "good morning" back. and then i inform...
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Short Story / What's On Television?
Version 2
5 Reviews   0 Comments
You wake with a start. You sit up in bed, pajamas sticking to your clammy skin. This is the third night in a row nightmares have interrupted your sleep. You're breathing heavily. There's no way you can go back to sleep until you've cleared your mind of fear. You grab the remote control from your nightstand. Let's see what's on. Channel 4: The Monster That Ate Maple Street "My god... it's devouring our livelihood!" "There's no way to stop it. It's unstoppable!" "Not unstoppable, Douglas. Every...
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Short Story / What's On Television?
Version 1
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You wake with a start. You sit up in bed, pajamas sticking to your clammy skin. This is the third night in a row nightmares have interrupted your sleep. You're breathing heavily. There's no way you can go back to sleep until you've cleared your mind of fear. You grab the remote control from your nightstand. Let's see what's on. Channel 4: The Monster That Ate Maple Street "My god... it's devouring our livelihood!" "There's no way to stop it. It's unstoppable!" "Not unstoppable, Douglas. Every...
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Short Story / Crocodile Teeth
Version 3
7 Reviews   1 Comment
To my friends at the Ashur police department: If Timothy Weaver ever told the truth, it was a half-truth, and Tim Weaver didn't tell the truth often. Asked where Weaver had acquired his extraordinary aptitude for skewing reality, most people would say something like, "His parents didn't teach him right from wrong," or "He's got a demon in'im." Neither were true: the fact was, he simply enjoyed lying. In Weaver's mind, the thrill, however brief, that came from deceiving someone was incomparabl...
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Spider's Kiss, Chapter 1
Good. Stylistically, I commend you. Narrative, description, and dialogue are well-balanced. Use of paragraphing is excellent -- seems an odd thing to praise, but there does seem to be an art to it. The narration does sound natural. It could stand a bit more character, as it's a tad matter-of-fact -- but no major complaints. The first paragraph is a great hook. Now, you had me interested up until the vampire. While personal preferences vary, I am one of those who would rather not have another ...
Short Story / Angel D...
Locked
The poetic beginning works, and I like the idea of being lost in sleep, not knowing which way to go to awake. The first two sentences of the second paragraph were especially well-done -- I like the thought, and I love the rhyme. I would caution you on the use of parentheses. In the beginning their abundance seemed to be a poetic device, which I can accept, given its limited use. But it reappears in the second-to-last paragraph. Perhaps this is an intended connection, and I am missing an impli...
Short Story / The Cottage
The prose is functional, but little else. There is a fine line between minimal and dull: I believe this piece crosses a bit too far over on the "dull" side. Turgidity is to be avoided, but personality and life must be felt. The primary troublemaker would seem to be ugly repetition. Consider how often the words "the man" show up. These were a distraction. I believe one step towards smoothing things out would involve giving the man a name. Combine that with some simple variation of sentence str...
Short Story / A Man and his Island:
This is an interesting series of thoughts. As a short story, though, I'm not sure what to make of it. I often feel that shorter, contemplative pieces such as this one would do well to be a part of a longer story -- a story in which something happens and characters develop. A monologue alone has significantly less impact than a monologue delivered by a character we know within the context of a story we've been following. How much greater would the emotional response from the reader be if he kn...
100.0% Review Quality (2 Votes)