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LOC: Flossmoor, IL
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: May 05
LOC: Flossmoor, IL
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: May 05
Hello, I am a student at Columbia College in the fiction writing program. I will graduate in 2007.
I am currently working on 2 possible novels. One is Sci-fi/dark fantasy and the other will be horror/thriller. Please view my writing and leave honest critiques. My feelings aren’t easily hurt.
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One I am sitting at the foot of my mother’s tiny bed when I open my eyes. I’m back inside of our cottage again, watching her fade away. I already know what thought is coming next. This is all my fault. I should have gone with her. I feel her hand on mine and I look up. “This isn’t your fault.” She coughs out the words. As she smiles at me her hand moves over to the small bedside table. “No…mother. Please.” My shoulders shake as she slides the necklace over her head. The Novostone shines bril...
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Seven Jack hovers outside of Nex’s cottage and listens. The six creatures he sees standing inside fill him with something that he is quite unfamiliar with, dread. Nex he knows he can handle. She is immature and unsure of herself. These six are frighteningly self-possessed. It would take special cunning to make his way through them and to Nex. He wants her power, and before he takes it he wants her. The time here passes as if there were no time at all and Jack is becoming more and more unrave...
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Jack Lauhgton sat behind the large oak desk in his office and stared at the photograph of his wife Elizabeth. She was standing in front of their home and was gesturing grandly at the Fleur-de-lis that she had painted around the exterior. Her blonde curls gently framed her soft features. She was as beautiful to him as she had been the day they met seven years ago. He was hurrying back to the office after wasting too much time browsing his morning paper when he saw her. She was walking out of M...
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I dropped to my knees and placed my hands on the ground and they were nearly hidden by the flowing sleeves of my cloak. I’d have to remember to shorten them someday. I focused the energy I’d gathered into the novostone. It shone a blinding garnet when it activated, filling the grove with crimson light that I knew could be seen for miles through the village. I got a telepathic glimpse of a man and his wife as they stood in their field, staring at the rusty streak that splashed across the sky. ...
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I failed; I can’t believe I failed. What am I talking about? Of course I failed. Hubris is deadly. Didn’t my mother tell me that once? There was only one solution. I would have to kill him now. His soul belonged to the keepers, and he was being punished for my arrogance. Who was I to interfere in their duty? Who was I to take without fair trade? “You are my daughter, Nyx.” The voice boomed out from behind me. Zeus. “Why didn’t you warn me about this? Why didn’t you stop me?” I had to blame so...
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This begins benign enough. Woman on vacation gets ogled by drunk on plane. Nice way to introduce the main character. I would like to know what she saw or felt to let her know that someone had been in her house, other than just a feeling. How did it feel to her?
Hah, I like Sadie and I like the slightly humorous tone this takes. The description is vivid and clear and you give enough detail to keep the reader where they should be. I think the chapter could go on a it longer, though. This reads more like a scene than an entire chapter. Kimmy
I am usually not a fan of the second person pov but it works well here with the standoffish nature of the angel and the fact that it/they speak/s for God. The tone and pace stays even through the piece. You give just enough detail to grond the reader in space but you leave enough open for them to make it a personal experience. Nice Job. Kimmy
This isn't bad but I have to ask where the story is going? Why is it called Julie's story when we see Ricardo's pov for most of it? Read it out loud and the things you need to work on should jump out. Keep it up!
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