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LOC: United Kingdom
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: November 21
LOC: United Kingdom
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: November 21
Here I am! As you see I’m 25, and working full time. Finding time to write is one of the hardest points in my day. But I get there. I’m working hard, playing little, and have been told on occassion that I should get out more with friends. Hey! What can I say? All my friends are on paper.
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11 “A strange conversation indeed young wolf,” Freya said. She was still in battle armour her cloak falling behind her in a sweep of feathers. It looked wrong for the way she was posed, leaning casually against the door arms crossed over her chest. “Two visits in one day, Freya, that’s a record even for you,” I said sounding a little annoyed. I didn’t care. Right then I wanted to go home and cuddle Andy. “You were startled at the mention of the scars....
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6 The traffic hadn’t let up at all, on the way to the office. Sunday down time certainly does not exist in London. I’d spent a good hour in the ghetto, and driving back through the city had taken its toll. My headache had roared back with a vengeance as soon as I’d finished with the crime scene, and I hadn’t taken any aspirin with me. The crowd still at the fence hadn’t helped, shouting questions and flashing camera’s my way. I’d ignored them as best ...
Version 2
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Bullets fly over, as we hunker down low, Avoiding the strikes, while we cower in snow. War’s why we’re here, the orders that came, Had us bought down to hell, but it’s cold just the same. I wrote home just last week, but the letter ain’t sent, I'd left in a hurry, and it sits in my tent. The orders were clear, no delays, no farewells, Just go hold the line, ‘cause they’re ringing the bells. The warning knell came, and with rifle held tight, I sprinted through snow, and the blackest of night. ...
Version 3
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1 The moon was full in the night sky and it was late by human standards or would that be early? For a creature like me it’s sometimes hard to tell when one moment ends and another begins. It doesn’t matter, what matters is that it’s never too late for a hunt. And no god or man would stop us. This hunt had begun in a park in the center of the city. It had been quiet and peaceful, the perfect setting for unsuspecting prey. And she was as unsuspecting as they came. Hyde Park was our agreed upon ...
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An interesting medieval style of mystery here. This was certainly enjoyable to read and you have definitely got into the showing rather than telling point of view. You've set the scene well, going straight into a point of action with the sparing session, this immediately draws the reader in and catches their attention. The only thing I found was the fight didn't seem as well choreographed as it could be. The moves seemed very randomized and I think a fighter of Royan's skill would consider hi...
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This was captivating as I read. Of the many fantasy stories I have read, I have found that figures such as the Selkies tend to take a backseat to what some people consider the more famed fey species of mythology. I like the purpose that you've given the Teller. The time when stories were told by word of mouth was very much a communual thing. Bards and minstrels plying their trade with grand stories of great deeds or the strange and wonderful creatures of the world. But here we find the stuff ...
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Do I sense magic in the air? I like how you've introduced the character of Brianna by starting with her dream. This immediately provokes some thought as to the importance of the events of her childhood. I've a feeling they will play a large part in the plot. You've established the 'family' dynamic well too. Amanda sounds fun to be around and there is a definite sense of parental feeling from her, but also the sense that in acting like a teenager she's more in touch with Brianna's thought proc...
The frightening mind of an unrepentant killer. You played the psychology well with Jack's character. His first aversion then drunken agreement to get closer to Leila illustrating just how careful a killer can be in his decisions. How they can play the game and change the rules without the victim ever knowing it. Such is a frightening thought. You have some beautiful descriptive sentences which draw the reader into the narrative well. However some sentences read quite puzzlingly and perhaps yo...
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