The excitement of what is to come is invigorating and keeps the reader involved in the story. The let down is too much finding the snort (I thought would be a bull) from only a friendly cat. If the build up is too big for the let down as a reader I would become frustrated if this were to occur too many times. Once or twice the intrugue is very interesting. I did not read the prologue or the first two chapters. I noticed in the characters early following of the cat what seemed to be at a roun...

I first read chapter 3 without reading the prologue or the first 2 chapters. My interest was enough to read chapter 2. The hiccup with the typo's is a hitch in the get along, but the story line is interesting. Keeping the reader reading is the ultimate goal in any writing and you have managed that area well. Now my reading and futher reading seems more of a curiosity. I don't yet understand how Sci Fi or Fantasy will work out, but I have picked up on Kaileigh being a suspect in a murder.

The writer will know best if I understood the correct intentions of the content being passed if I explain my understanding. An old friend of the bride who has grown in the uppity world of class, has agreed to be the best man to the groom. It seems there are some jealousy issues of the best man toward the groom. The best man appears to dread the high society life-style he has come to live, and maybe in midlife crysis desiring the lifestyle of his youth. If I am too far off, "I appolagize," It...

Perhaps the clarity was ment to be obscure. The topic that seems to be at hand is more the loss of innocence to someone without love. It is a tear jerker with my understanding.

-Spelling: neighbour = the "u" is extra correct: neighbor; -I am not familiar with the foreign words to know if some words are mis-spelled in english or placed for effect in the foreign language. -"of a fabric she back home" = something missing maybe: of a fabric she owned back home

Is your Haiku/Senryu just a complaint without poetry?