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AGE: 34
LOC: Canada
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: July 13

I’ve been working on the same novel, mainly on napkins and torn pieces of paper found only in the bottom of my purse, for the last three years. I’m hoping this site will be a vehicle out of my present inertia, so that I can finally put this work on paper and send it to a publisher, (insert heavy sigh here). I’m looking for honest feedback and the occasional supportive cyber hug.

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Novel Treatments / Bad Faeries (working title)
Version 1
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The light from the No Vacancy sign pulsates throughout the room like a steady heartbeat. She sits on the edge of the bed rocking to its silent rhythm, the metronome in a melody between light and dark, a song only she can hear. Outside the night is dark, the air crisp with frost. The wind howls, pounds its angry fists against the window. It finds a crack in the glass and lets itself in, an unwelcome guest in an already cold room. She doesn’t notice. From the corner of her eye she catches a gli...
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Poetry / Possession
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2 Reviews   0 Comments
Theres a fine line between love and lust. How do you really know which side you're on? How much are you willing to risk for either? Am I afraid? No, not really. What I am, is uncertain. What am I willing to risk? For years I've been contained, held in by my own perceptions of who I should be. I don't have the energy nor the will to fight against myself any longer. Remnants of the old cry out cautionary warnings, but the new me is selfish and refuses to listen. The new me is hungry for life. S...
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Poetry / Words
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In the darkest moments I fear you Words Portal to my soul I fear your honesty Your brutal cruelty Without mercy Expose me Strip me down Flesh, Bones Twisted entrails Words You speak the truth Force me to look Deconstruct And I fear you.
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Novel Treatments / Murder Calling Chapter 2
Not a bad piece of writing, but there is one major problem which makes it hard to follow. In any piece of work, timeline is very important. The tense of the piece keeps changing(for example in one paragraph it starts with "I nod my head..."(present) then goes to "i just told myself..."past tense. It seems like a minor thing, and just something your English teacher would pick on you for, but it makes it hard for the reader to stay grounded in the story. One question I have is, is the person na...
Sci Fi & Fantasy / Winds of Change (working title)
Thanks for letting me review your work. This seems to be a good beginning to an interesting saga. If I may offer some points to take into consideration for your next rewrite; right from the outset you begin your story with a sentence written in the incorrect tense, "creating a flashing explosions" try perhaps... Lightening struck a large pine tree sending an explosion of burning splinters into the darkness. The playing foxes seem out of place in this seemingly fierce storm and take away from...
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Wow. At first I was taken aback by the old English almost Shakespearean feel of this poem, but I have to admit that as I read on I began to like this poem more and more. It's beautifully written, practically drenched in vivid imagery. It brings me back to a time when writers were not afraid to use, big colorful words and when readers were not afraid to read them. Thanks for letting me read this work. I thoroughly enjoyed it.
Well I have to tell you honestly this would not be my usual pick at the book store. As it stands, I'm not quite sure there is enough content to really grab someone’s attention. This type of underground society thing has been done to death. It seems that all the bad guys are sent to the underworld. Why not try something different, something more insidious. You have here the raw bones of a story, the elements are here, but I'd keep at it. Try to surprise us, give us something different. Good l...