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I read every word to these poems and they put me through a range of emotions which is what good poetry is supposed to do. These poems definitely took time to craft and arrange and you deserve accolades for that feat alone. Nicely done!

I like where this story is going. Great character development and the dialogue is thought out and realistic. I would advise making more of an effort to expand on your detail. The interaction between your character's speaks more than using a bunch of needless words sometimes. Keep going and I'll await the next upload.

I absolutely loved this poem. It spoke of love in a fresh way. A way of truth and bearing and in a way that's still completely relatable. The horizon can be felt and dealt as easily as one imagines sharing a caring smoke after sex. This is Crowley-esque in demeanor and intent and is just as pure. There isn't any other way to describe the sincerity in therse words other than you had to have lived it at one point in your life. Hate, love, defeat, and rebirth all conjugate and draw power from ea...

The atmosphere was really well though out. I enjoyed it but it could probably use spellcheck or a cursory glance at it.

Although I truly enjoyed the story as a whole there were so many distractions grammatically it made it almost impossible to keep focused on what you're characters were doing than what they were saying. Correct puncuation is a tenet if you're going to be a writer. Do your readers a favor and take the time to properly quote dialogue and speech. Once you've cleaned it up a bit I'll come back and give it my full attention.