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AGE:
16
LOC: Freeport, IL
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: December 18
LOC: Freeport, IL
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: December 18
“So we beat on, boats against the current, borne back ceaselessly into the past”—F. Scott Fitzgerald
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Why do you treat me so? Like I'm a freaking joke You say you care but you treat me like I'm not there For what reason I ask Do I have to wear this stupid mask To not reveal my real life one day in strife I will reveal what is real
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Did you really know How my heart seemed to glow In your presence? Is this my sentence for loving someone who doesn't even see me? Did you realize I was here? Or did you even care that I shed a tear everytime you didn't see me? Should I try to get your attension Or just live in my depression without you feeling depressed and blue because you never see me? I wish you were here now I'd tell you my feelings. I'd scream them out loud But would you, or could you ever...
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Very romantic. and interesting. I felt connection to it which kept me reading. Good job. I hope to see future pieces.
Nice contrast of how you were serching and how he was searching too. Then you find each other. The flow of this gets thrown off in a few lines where you repeat words that keep rhyme but through off the flow. It might be just the way I'm reading this, just try to prevent breaking the flow even if it doesn't rhyme. I really like this because it shows how two people can be pulled together for no rhyme or reason.
My heart strings were pulled when I read this. I completly feel the emotions going on within this piece. No major errors that I could pick up on. Great job!
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