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AGE: 40
LOC: United States
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: October 21

“If you have not done things worthy of being written about, at least write things worthy of being read.”
~Giacomo Casanova
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URBIS is my workshop…
  
I have been published in FlashFire500 & The Legendary.  The Shine Journal, Emerald Tales, Soundzine, Ruthless People Magazine & PicFic @ The Folded Word have all recently accepted items for publication. I am always working on submissions to other literary journals, reviews, ezines and magazines.

My thumbdrives warehouse poems contemplating revision or release and as always my words are restlessly residing in moleskine repositories awaiting reincarnation…

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Poetry / The Gulls Glide By
by TerJa
I like the use of the repeating refrain which serves to bring the reader back to a vantage point above the action of the glacier. However, if one is going to repeat phrases make sure they are stellar sounding and original. "glide by...turning, dipping & watching" are all a bit pedantic and common so they don't add the poetic oomph needed in repetitive lines hinging verses together. tipping wings, spying, wheeling are some suggestions. The other observation is that each verse sounds a bit like...
Poetry / Until It's Light She Dances Version 10
by oknapp
There are many elements that work beautifully in this poem. The lines are brief and emphatic so that the reader is not given too much to chew upon but just enough to vet out the visuals being rendered. Here are some turns of phrase I enjoyed: V1: Through fractured blinds Night etches out precious light Languish beneath ragged covers Seeking the sights and Sounds of strangers V2: Wistful eyes peeping Through a little crack A glimpse through barren trees V3: A clock with no hands to measure Dar...
100.0% Review Quality (2 Votes)
Novel Treatments / The Lambent Light: Chapter 14
by DCAllen
“Let us rejoice and be glad!” [in it] - at least that is how I recall hearing it. Just an aside. 'first preview' - could probably drop the _first_, sounds redundant. Pg2: The desultory chaos of the procession is hilarious in its narrative simplicity. "bringing up the rear" - twice in two pages, one cannot miss the implied double entendre. Well done... triangle/stars - something about the singular/plural aspect of this similie bothered me. 'sang his verse:' - is it essential to be so specific ...
Novel Treatments / The Lambent Light: Chapter 11
by DCAllen
Pg10: I have said for a while when was Rod/Rob going to express some guilt, remorse, doubt, regret for his actions and this is a nice segue however...but hadn't they done it 'in hiding' before? Most of their liasons had been clandestine of sorts. Pg12: 'No wonder he don't see nothing in you' is she referring to Rob/Rod here? If so it implies a 'crush' and yet we know that she knows Rob/Rod is gay...I do know that girls will have crushes on their gay friends (this one certainly has) but Diane ...
Novel Treatments / The Lambent Light: Chapter 13
by DCAllen
Pg2: Lord? ::why the question marks? Is it to denote inflection? Just found it to be a trifling oddity in a prayer of supplication. Pg3: Nice phallic double entendre at play with the mic ::Ah ha, and glad to see the slip wasn't missed by Cathy. Pg4: Great backstory on Cathy and epitomizes well the simmering jealousy in brief detail. Pg5: Uhm? Okay...with the type of pet (tootles/doodles)name relationship going on here I find it highly unrealistic that a married couple, with one partner away o...
100.0% Review Quality (2 Votes)
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