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I'm sorry, but it breaks my concentration when typos are left in a work so I'm going to point those out first. Second sentence: space after first comma. Fifth sentence: I can not tell for certain, but "season" should be "reason"? Fifteenth sentence: "as a felt" that "a" should be "I". 3rd sentence: This sentence was one of those eyesores that make me trip while reading. "I was never rude - never cutting in, yawning ..." would be a better way to accomplish what I think you intend there. All ri...

This quote isn't intriguing. "kat" misspelled on purpose or just a typo? I get the point that society causes pain to the individual, I just feel it could have been done better. I will say that though it may be cliched (not sure) the "flesh of jesus christ" part was a good use of imagery. Lose the "kat of nine tails"(sic) I say. Other than that, point is clear if stated in an less than interesting way.

Most of the poem is cliched. Starting with the first line, but sometimes we just have to write. So I'll stick to technical details. The third line doesn't make sense to me literally or figuratively. "Dilution" is a process of making something weaker/dispersment. The word choice lacks sense if purposeful. Important to note that poetry does not necessarily have to rhyme. Perhaps "diversion"? It makes a little more sense, but because of the current phrasing, I'm not clear what you were going for...

I like the wording in this poem, but I'm also left confused toward any meaning. Some poems are written just for the aesthetics, but I can tell this is meant to have meaning that I'm just not picking up on. A part that really leaves me blank is "A dream of dreams / The thought of thoughts", is it expressing anything or just for effect? Technical: -"defigned" should be "defined".

This story was excellent, I've never dealt with or seen some of the stuff in this story, but you wrote and described everything so well that not once did I feel confused. One of my favorite descriptions, "The thumb and the white oak shavings and the sawdust were all the same pale pink and creamy red colors. You had to look hard before the finger jumped out at you. People were yelling as if in a great hall. Georges thumb was Modern Art." I just thought it was absolutely brilliant and humorous ...