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AGE: 19
LOC: Canada
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: November 20

I am no critic, but i want my work out ther to be seen and read. most of the stuff i write has a inspirational message behind it or a faith message.

i am currently writng three novels

one is a long big series called

M.D.P

and two others with alot of work to do.

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Why is life so complicated? Frustration, how in out nature We are able to turn simple to complex If life was not complicated Would you enjoy it? No one would blame you if you did. Who could not enjoy it? If life was not complicated? We would enjoy the joys of life Birth would simple, death not so terrifying But, if life was not difficult How would we learn to appreciate the little things That life throws are way. How would you learn from your mistakes? If life was not complicated You would n...
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   Episode One Halloween Old Man’s Ghost It is a cold night with no wind. This Halloween kids are actively scouring the neighbourhood for candy. All of them dressed in costumes imitating the supernatural and carrying pillowcases bulging with candy from all the houses they had gone. I just knew that when school started tomorrow the school would be half-sick and the other half would be bouncing off the walls from sugar rush. I am no fan of Halloween; I greatly despised it. Takin...
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Action Adventure / M.D.P
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 Dispatched by Central Authority Secretariat Special Task Force Defence Supervisor and Mass Duel Project (M.D.P) Advisor of The Special Defense Army To: Supervisor in Charge No. 31 7339 M.D.P No. 77 Program (June 3rd,1832 Hr) We have confirmed evidence of a intrusion into the Central Government High Class Secured Projects and Programs. The intrusions detection was located May 23rd 1334 Hours. We are currently have the intrusion under investigation on any additional evidence of re-entry i...
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Action Adventure / M.D.P
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  Prologue Government Report Government Internal Report 7339 No. 13006679 (Top Secret) Distpatched by Central Authority Secretariat Special Task Force Defence Supervisor and Mass Duel Project (M.D.P) Advisor of The Special Defense Army To: Supervisor in Charge No. 31 7339 M.D.P No. 77 Program (June 3rd,1832 Hr) We have confirmed evidence of a intrusion into the Central Government High Class Secured Projects and Programs. The intrusions detection was located May 23rd 1334 Hours. We are c...
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Crime, Thrillers & Mystery / M.D.P
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Prologue Government Report Government Internal Report 7339 No. 13006679 (Top Secret) Distpatched by Central Authority Secretariat Special Task Force Defence Supervisor and Mass Duel Project (M.D.P) Advisor of The Special Defense Army To: Supervisor in Charge No. 31 7339 M.D.P No. 77 Program (June 3rd,1832 Hr) We have confirmed evidence of a intrusion into the Central Government High Class Secured Projects and Programs. The intrusions detection was located May 23rd 1334 Hours. We are currentl...
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Violent By Nature-Part 1
ok have the see set up and you say that ther are people walking the streets of stadium and then you go on and say that you begin to walk toward the city, so where are you exactly? you descirbe it later but would it be better to put that detail of the character living in the suburbs in the begining than go from there, put a place and location to get the reader famiralised. Ready for action, I sprinted across the parking lot here i would have to put it differntly, for you have stated that you a...
Sci Fi & Fantasy / Post Uprising-Chapter 1
the copper haired agent snatched my phone away prior to this you didn't describe the guards before saying so which one did it? raises questions like what did they look like, did they both have copper hair or what? you do a great job at describing the story but the characters involved may be dressed up a little as into more describing.
Crime, Thrillers & Mystery / The Proprietress
pointing to the grainy black and white photos of a perky little blonde woman um here i see a problem, the picture is black and white yet the lady is blond so, i would have described her in a different way like elegant or something in that form, just to keep with the black and white part. she offered proudly. this is an action among a person speaking, is it possible to do something like that? . Her eyes were an introspective gray in color, and she looked over their silver rims, often. “How int...
Haiku/Senryu / 9/24/07
flows extremely well, paints a vivid image with allowing the reader to feel it
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Flash Fiction / Samaritan (version 2)
interesting with a twist, loved how it put the characters and has the image planted as you start out, the idea of a Samaritan is to help on and here the Samaritan is a monster well played