JessicaHumiston's profile
AGE:
25
LOC: Syracuse, NY
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: December 23
LOC: Syracuse, NY
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: December 23
I would love to sit down with you and read our work together over coffee and talk about life. Where, oh where, have all the flowering poets gone? I have been looking for them all over, under every rock, but can only seem to find them while staring, in a dark room, at a bright screen of words and impersonality.
None the less… here’s my own little slice of glowing technological togetherness, in this dim room of a world.
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The time has come We gotta stay and fight or get the hell out The time has come for revolution or migration perhaps isolation perhaps rejuvenation Something must be done no more wasting of time Revolution &n...
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Lost within the convenience of things landfills filled with disposable dreams laying uner cities made up of broken beams of what is a desperate generation a girl &n...
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It ended as quickly as it began this little crush of mine years of friendship brought down by phisical attraction unwinding over years into nothing but a nod as we pass it ended this life long infatuation with love and kindness i have been harboring within me time stops as if we WERE the world it began again slowly agonizing over every move rotating toward a new day unlike any other in all of existence it ended my hate-hate relationship with myself and my curre...
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What am I doing? Maybe it's the weather but I just don't seem myself today. It's so god damn hot after being so god damn cold and my body just can't get used to this changing climate that we are all facing together as one. What am I doing? Maybe it's just me I think to myself while I fumble In my jean pocket for enough change to pay for gas so that I can make it to work 'cause I am fucking broke and I work so fucking hard for it. In this changing climate that we are all facing together as one...
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there is something to be said for kisses that were never anything but kisses the slight of hand of a simple touch as we pass through each others' lives without leaving any marks there's something to be said for the wonder and mystery of the what could have been while we hold tight to the moment as if it is a lifeboat on the rough sea of love there is something to be said for shared glances between two pairs of eyes on sidewalks smiles over grocery lines and the good morning exchange of strang...
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I thought that the begining of the piece is very strong, and works. The last few lines, i feel could use some work wording wise. Though, it could just be the fact that it's more obviously about chili the second vrs, that is throwing my imagination off kilter? Very well done not using the works a, an, or the.. and also good structure.
I would change the last line from "like blood coursing through the desert" to "like blood coursing through a desert life" to bring it back to the begining of "life in grass". Some great imagry, indeed. Life's path from wet to dry, grass to dirt. Well done.
simple, rhythmic, and some what haunting. Liked the set up, strong structure. I think a lot of people can mold this around their own lives, and it is good advice without being too pushy. Well done.
Very powerful. I read the piece before i had read your instructions, and i didn't even think about it having to do with an addict. Once i did, it had a whole new meaning to me. I liked it, but i was hard to read. I'm all for NOT using puctuation in poetry, but you should use the form of your piece to dictate how the reader reads, beat and what not.Exp, the reader will read "I use I drink you in" a lot differently than "I use I drink you in" even though they are on the same line. I think this ...
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