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AGE: 40
LOC: United Kingdom
GEN: Male
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Short Story / The Broken Urn
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Signifiers of the past are built into the fabric of the Hill. Historical generalities rest on the surface. In the network of too-narrow roads or the facades of early Victorian houses. Or Georgian, even Tudor, buildings. More personal, particular histories lie deeper. Buried beneath the everyday. Jane Pole had lived in her early Victorian terraced cottage for five months before she unearthed the first broken shard. It was a warm July day, and the sun gave out an enveloping heat which made her ...
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Short Story / Closure
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It was a few days before Christmas. The early afternoon sunlight, never more than a suggestive paleness behind grey clouds, was killed by the pollution-caked window of Paul Thomas’s Civic Hall office. What natural light reached his desk was no more than a cold remnant of the off-white radiance soaking the outside world, where concrete buildings, cement pavements and tarmac roads reflected the colour of the sky — water marks, chewing gum blotches and oil stains dappling their canvas. He didn’...
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Haiku/Senryu / SatNav
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Blue to left and right. Apparently I live in A land of rivers.
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Mr Cook paid no attention to the Planet World advertisement the first time he saw it on dinner time tv, happening to be engrossed in the slicing of a particularly well done pork chop. Only when the same commercial was repeated in the break during Football Funtime, while Mr Cook was negotiating the froth on the top of a can of draught Budleigh Best Bitter, was his attention drawn to the superlative vacation experience Planet World offered families from every socio-economic group above delta mi...
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Poetry / The Last Place
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The Last Place The cemeteries of Heptonstall Are feted by the living, With faded tombstones lying flat, Anonymous as eggs; A pavement of remembrance. A mourning and a ruined church Hold hands like leaping lovers might. While one serves life the other lies In shadow, and returns to dust. Like parents who have lost a child, Consoling words demand their tears, While Hebden Bridge, a daughter, chimes A future bridegroom, flowing white. The valley cannot lose the rain Which cries upon the town in ...
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This is a very personal piece, obviously written at a moment of strong emotion, as your reviewer notes point out. There lies its strength, and its weakness. It is powerful, and reads like a breathless outpouring of feeling. But it also lacks structure, and as a result loses some of its potential power. The 14 line format suggests a sonnet, but there's no consistent rhythm or rhyming scheme that I can discern. I'm a great believer that much of power of poetry comes from the tension between str...
Journalism / The way it is....
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Short Story / MESSENGER GIRL
This is the best thing I've read here for a while. It was original, and kept me entertained, despite actually being incredibly uneven in terms of quality. I almost didn't get past the first paragraph, which seemed to be trying too hard, with the transvestite observations. But it felt like something worthwhile was going to happen. And sure enough, it did. A nice twist at the end, set up with a good sense of foreboding earlier. What do I mean by uneven? Well, some great use of language juxtapos...
Short Story / A Gateway into Despair
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