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AGE:
33
LOC: United Kingdom
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: July 24
LOC: United Kingdom
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: July 24
Borderline idiot savant whose lack of appropriate training has not stood in the way of polluting the internet with words, music and the occassional scrawl.
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Parachute did not open. The end.
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An unknown woman, all blue rinse and beige mackintosh came to visit my next door neighbour the other night. She continued knock on the door long after it was apparent that no one was home and as I was attempting to enter the bosom of my dwelling she attempted to engaged me in conversation. Not wishing to be trapped in the bindings of her fiery red eyes like a night time bunny wandering foolishly along country lanes, I avoided her gaze and shut my ears to her words. Constable Cotton wandered p...
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I sicked his head up from the depths of my craw. It was the eater of worlds who had been eaten and beaten by my own valedictory ritual of devastation. I was now the eater of the eater of worlds. He popped right outta my mouth and into the palm of my hand. Like a little cry baby, he foetally hugged himself, sucking his thumb and tucking his head. His barbed skeleton, revealed through the actions of my belly juices, wrapped his featureless, sightless head. The mouth hiccupped and out of the pin...
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This doesn't really say anything about the creative life for me and doesn't fit into the memoir category. It's just a mildly amusing joke using a six word format.
Most are muddled. Some are lost. And yet some people ask how much they cost. Feels like you've just used cost because it rhymes with lost instead of searching for a more appropriate sentence. The rhythm makes it an unsmooth journey as there seems to be no common tempo for the lines as you go through the piece. Still you get the feeling across so not too bad overall.
This is one of those pieces of writing where the content and premise of the story is quite good but the writing and the way it's put together need a lot of work. The first paragraph is indicative of problems that run through the piece. It started with a high-pitched whistle. It was coming from my Apple II computer, which normally didn’t make any noise at all. I knew something was wrong, but before I could switch it off the sound got louder until it stopped with a pop and a fizzle. When I ope...
Is this a serious piece or a mickey take? either way I like it. THere's a deep philosophy being expounded. I see the Ham sandwich as a metaphor for sex. Putting a pig in your mouth is a sin in the eyes of his blessed self in every sense of the word. The imagery of the big gay deer works for me too although it may be a little strong for the five to nine year olds.The brevity of the chapter works well. You get your point across with clarity and economy of prose. The one criticism is the repetit...
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