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LAST LOGIN: September 27
LAST LOGIN: September 27
I have written seven novels, four published: BABY!, THROUGH THE FIRE, DEVILS & ANGELS and NEW MILLENNIUM JITTERS. (See I-Proclaim.com Bookstore/Fiction.)
I’ve also written two plays: MAN & MY MAN (posted on Urbis) and ROSIE & THE BULL).
Additonally, I’m a professional freelance copyeditor who has worked for The New York Newspaper Guild, Harlem Writers Crew, and the Infinity Foundation. (See JamesAbro.com)
I also recently returned from India where I was researching a book I am writing on Yoga and America called AN AMERICAN YOGA: THE KRIPALU STORY.
I am seeking professional contacts in the publishing and film making business as well as clients for editing and book propoosal writing.
My other intersts include swimming, saili…
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After only a few hours of sleep Bruce awakens with a feeling he usually associates with beginning a day when he has something exciting or risky planned. In fact, it's the beginning of an end of summer holiday weekend and he has nothing planned. He gets up from his bed in the dark and puts on water for coffee. Then sits down in front of a long wood table and gazes out through an oversized window. Predawn light stirs in through trees and scribbles dark lines onto walls in b...
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Dear Susanna Einstein: I have written a quartet of novels offering an original, anecdotal look at life in American from the end of the 60s to the present. I am submitting the first chapter of the first novel in the quartet, BABY!. BABY! takes place at the end of the 60s\ beginning of the 70s. An infant born backstage at a rock concert becomes estranged from his parents after they are arrested for possesion of hashish. . The remainder fo the novel revolves around Bruce, whose ...
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It didn't seem quite natural to me that they would have the conversation they did. It is also not clear from the beginning if he had jumped in naked or was clothed. She talks about his chest as though it's bare, then later we learn that he was wearing an open shirt. I also wanted to know here age before you revealed it. And little inconsitent style things like this:“Wow!” Danella thought. “He sure as heck isn’t from around here. I would definitely remember anyone who looked like him, that’s f...
It's a very relatable sentiment, but you don't offer anything new on the theme. How about developing it more? Having good sex and being a good responsible parent don't always go together, n'est pas? There sure are a lot of kids brought into the world for all the wrong reasons, and society ends up paying the price for it. Address these things in your essay. There's always one's personal needs, and the bigger picture to consider.
One is not intrigued by what's going on to the last few sentences. That's too long. Plus, there's some sloppy writing: He turned careful This should either be he turned carefully, or he turned, careful There are othere similar errors. Get a gopod book on style. And rework the piece so the reader knows right from the beginning tht this may bwe their last night together -- depending on what hapens later this day. Build the uspense before you start giving the details about the characters -- othe...
I agree with you that the five paragrpah format is limjiting and I wish you had more space to eleborate on your arguent. It's a good one, though the writing is at times just plain careless, for instance: This leads us to the next reason why drugs are society’s biggest problem, the violence they cause. Another problem with illicit drugs is the violence they cause. You should be able to edit these kinds of mistakes out of the text before your final draft. I'd suggest reading some copyediting bo...
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