Simple words, well put together, leaves little after thought though. Make a great Thrash metal number! Bit sordid to be mainstream but still workable,

Nicely put together words that leave me slightly numb with the inner beauty of sadness. Sadness can be beautiful! I like this poem, I can feel the pain the writer is going through. Very Well Written and laid Out. Give us more.

What a very nice poem, certainly brings fond memories back to my time in Paris. The words are have feeling and strike the senses within. Well Done

This is a nice piece, think it needs to be a bit longer to capture more imagination. It could possible get published in an anthology Well done

This is a nice piece, captures imagination and flows so well right until the end leaving you wanting more. It could possible get published in an anthology of some kinds Well done lovely bit of work, you got talent!

This is a nice piece, captures imagination and flows so well right until the end leaving you wanting more. It could possible get published in an anthology of some kinds Well done, you have raw talent, that expresses so much.

This is a nice piece, captures imagination and flows so well right until the end leaving you wanting more. It could possible get published in an anthology of some kinds Well done, you have a fine way with words!

This is a nice piece, captures imagination and flows so well right until the end leaving you wanting more. It could possible get published in an anthology of some kinds Well done