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AGE: 17
LOC: United Kingdom
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: July 29

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Short Story / Not My Lucky Day
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I paused in the stairway, chewed cigar hanging from my mouth lazily. Watery blue eyes squinted back at me from the mirror, showing me my reflection. Black hair, combed back to perfection, black suit of the finest quality. I pursed my lips, smiling. I looked pretty damn good. The click-clack of my shoes against polished wood echoed loudly, enveloping the hall in sound, as I shuffled across the ballroom, down the basement stairs and into the back room. “Hello boys.” I said, placing my cane dow...
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Short Story / White Lines
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Three white lines across the table, laid out like messy brushstrokes. He hitched his trousers up until the bottoms were around his ankles, showing off two black boots, and saddled the chair clumsily. He nodded at the girl sitting opposite him. “You okay with this?” He asked softly, a contradiction to his stern expression. “Yes…I think so. Too late now, anyway, isn’t it?” She said, her short bobbed hair wobbling as she spoke. She bit her lip, which was a mess of red lipstick, and fingered the ...
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Poetry / A Feeble Attempt
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After so much silence I made a feeble attempt To try and make you smile. And you did, my love, you did. But the smile… It never reached your eyes.
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / The Lunar Cast
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The sun was dipping low into the sky, barely a sliver visible. It threw deep oranges, bright reds into the sky, streaking it with colour. Too bright eyes reflected this. A girl, no older than fifteen stared up, mesmerized. She knew what this meant. The Lunar Cast. She could here the chatting, the clinking of glasses, the drunken laughter behind her. A festival all of Grove Hill celebrated. The harvest moon would come out soon, and she would be forcing brandy down her throat. It was the way th...
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Short Story / 6 word memior of my dad
I did not read your comments, if I'm honest. This is because I believe if the six word memoir was good enough, it would need no explaining. It put me off it, a little. However, I did like your six words, and it did make sense without reading the story in your comments. It made me think of hoarders, and a garage sale hunters. It was amusing and sweet, but not very strong. Perhaps work on it so it does not need a story go with it.
Humor/Satire / SIX WORD MEMOIR
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Criticism / For Emily Gould
I did not understand this fully, but that did not stop me from enjoying it. One thing that really halted the piece for me was n+1. Symbols always jolt you, and I think sometimes it can be effective, but here it ruined it for me a bit. Maybe you should think of changing? I'm not sure how that would work, though.
Poetry / Queen Bee
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I think this would be better started with a capital, so "Former drug addict, now I write." It tells a nice, short story, of writing helping you through bad times, and I think that's a good memoir.