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AGE:
34
LOC: Waukegan, IL
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: May 12
LOC: Waukegan, IL
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: May 12
I share my life for growth. you might see your advice on stage one day. I’m working to become a worthy slam/spoken word poet. I’ll always live by water.
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Poet! I confess, it is me. Beyond a skim, and you'll see. My brain expands like fire. My eyes constrict in the brightness. My arms open for the light. My hands close like books. My heart releases for words. I squeeze out knowledge. I glide in like oil. I chafe like grit. I live outward for a gift. I die inward for change. I dream perfect. It's all clear as can be... In the way he smiles at her. In the stuttering politician. In the laughter of the audience. In the bruises on our ch...
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poet Yes, that’s me. Look and you’ll see. My brain expands like fire. My eyes contract for the brightness. My arms open for the light. My hands close like books. My heart releases for words. I’m gripping for knowledge. My words glide like oil. My friends grind like whetstones. I live outward for a gift. I hope inward like the eagle. I dream perfect. It’s all clear as can be. That’s positively, absolutely me.
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Version 1
5 Reviews
2 Comments
poet Yes, that’s me Look and you’ll see My brain expands like fire. My eyes contract for the brightness. My arms open for the light. My hands close like books. My heart releases for words. I’m gripping for knowledge. My words glide like oil. My friends grind like whetstones. I live outward for a gift. I hope inward like the eagle. I dream perfect. It’s all clear as can be. That’s positively, absolutely me
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"Great spirits have always found violent opposition from mediocrities. The latter cannot understand it when a man does not thoughtlessly submit to hereditary prejudices but honestly and courageously uses his intelligence." "The ruling class has the schools and press under its thumb. This enables it to sway the emotions of the masses." "The restriction of knowledge to an elite group destroys the spirit of the society and leads to its intellectual impoverishment." ~ Albert Einstein this is the ...
This was well done! good flow and rhythm. Have you ever considered poetry slam? ~ http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Poetry_slam .at any rate this piece was entertaining. The speaker in this poem seems to have an adolescent view of love. that's not bad - b/c it is communicated with great efficacy. I wouldn't change anything about it if that was your purpose. if not you can explore the fact that the speaker might not feel worthy of love. or how love is hard to catch because they cannot love there se...
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wow. got to say the first person is on like donkey kong in this piece. it unfolds like a map. I didn't know what I was lookin at till it was almost all the way unfolded. at 11:00 I thought the only place to go was cliche, but you opened with the freedom fried T.V.'s comment. I did have a problem with the way 09:10 started with "the chief stutters of horror" I was wondering (and I'm a novice) was the Chief stuttering of horrors or were there chief stutters of horror - like the most prevalent. ...
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this is good. I enjoyed the use of similes and metaphors. if your stating that words can be hurtful than this is a fine poem. if your trying to pull me in (the reader / at least from my limited perspective), throw in the word me and my instead of "human"... it's feels more personal. my soul/ words that control me, wound me,etc / for my ease / to see my pain... or you can make this about someone else and put your soul.. etc. and end it with my mind during... I really like the magicians daggers...
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