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AGE: 44
LOC: NY, NY
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: October 07

Hi! I was here before under the name “Scarlet M.”
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In real life I’m a psychotherapist.

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Poetry / Gentrification
Version 3
4 Reviews   1 Comment
You crept up the floors of our buildings-- like the strangler vine that kills the tree, at first you seemed harmless. We were happy you raised our real estate values. But you made us pay for your expensive projects and we liked our buildings the way they were. Interlopers insidiously destroy the ecosystem, our habitat. In the rainforest of humanity poetry and art grow in basements of tenements, take root and blossom in the fertile, stinking concrete soil. Lofts and studios are now just names ...
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Poetry / Your Last Binge
Version 1
9 Reviews   15 Comments
Cracks and lines on the mirror traverse your face. Is your hair turning white, or is that coke dust from your last binge? How old you’ve gotten In a few short years. Blown-back from the mountaintop you got lost in the blizzard. Better hope someone comes looking for you.
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Limericks / Political Limericks
Version 1
13 Reviews   11 Comments
There once was a woman named Hillary Whose foes she just wanted to pillory She went on the attack She said “but he’s black,” What kind of jerks does she think are we? A young Senator named Obama Had a name that could rhyme with Osama And a middle, Hussein, It became a refrain On the ceaseless right-wing hate-o-rama The candidate’s name was McCain Some said he was slightly insane He courted the loons And the right-wing buffoons We’ll be through the first day of his reign
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Version 1
8 Reviews   9 Comments
Urbis is home to some writers who, like many UFO sighters, imagine vividly ideas quite riddley, penned in opaque lines, not light verse. Some writers who call Urbis home, Should not be allowed far to roam, Without dictionary, Or spell check, verily, For their typos cause readers to groan. There was a young writer on Urbis, whose writing pretentious and mirthless lacked rhyme and reason, and wisdom’s season; Quite frankly, I thought it was worthless.
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Poetry / Urbis Writer(s)
Version 1
7 Reviews   6 Comments
There once was a writer on Urbis, whose writing lacked focus and purpose; he asked for advice, but failed to revise, and continued to tire us and irk us.
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Poetry / Bouquet
I think you meant "holly inappropriate." Otherwise, a good laugh! I think I read this before? I don't know how you can make it better. If you changed it, it would be a completely different poem, I think.
Poetry / Poetry***
Well this has a rather specific audience. It's good for what it is. I only have some suggestions regarding wording: "free verse that discusses all the norms" delete "all the." Also, discusses is a pretty bland verb. Is that what free verse does? if poetry is an art form, then it doesn't have to relay a message. Decide which position you believe in. I think you meant "laureate." I really like stanza five, because I can picture it. "What is normalization if you have to sacrifice everything" I t...
Poetry / Primary Colors
I like the idea of the poem...getting away from abstractions and back to the natural world and its beauty. At least that's what I think this is about...I think you could do more with this. Although it's true there are only three primary colors, you could change the title and add more colors. As for wording: I suggest deleting "the" from "Red is not the anger" (unnecessary) "life's" not "lifes'"
Poetry / A Body
I think this is a good idea for a poem, if I understood it. It seems to be describing someone looking at the body of a war casualty. Some of the lines or phrasing I didn't like. "the lust of another's trust" doesn't make sense to me. "sclera cry" neither. "future reference" is cumbersome."never again to be free" sounds clicheed. "psychologically naughty" I didn't understand. I think this could be powerful after some revisions.
Poetry / What am I doing?
I like it. It maybe could use a little more description. Maybe more adjectives or a simile or metaphor here or there. I don't think bones grind unless the cartilage is gone. Did you mean "scared" when you wrote "scarred"? That would make more sense. Consider sending this to a journal or ezine of political writing.