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AGE: 31
LOC: Dayton, OH
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: November 16

So, here it is.

And here I am.

Who am I?

I’m a visionary.  I seek life outside of the box, and crave art in every moment of that life.

I want the world to view my art, in whatever form I choose to release it in any given atmosphere or any given moment.

I can make up stories with the best of ‘em, and act ‘em out onstage or screen, too. And yet, ironically, I am a horrible liar.

That said, when I review your work, I try to be kind… but sometimes my need to out the truth will overcome my desire to sugar coat anything.  I won’t apologize for it, I’m just telling it like it is.

I truly hope you can and will do the same for me.

“us people are just poems…

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Poetry / Ghosts of Springtimes Past
by greggelz
What a beautiful piece. The flow rolls along quite nicely, and I just love the "la-la-la/ti-da-da-da" that is placed throughout the poem - it makes me think of the term "dancing through life." There's a sort of... longing feeling, almost a reminiscent feeling of what might have been. Kudos to you.
Poetry / Ripped Jeans.
by miamonster
I enjoy your abstract structure very much, though I must say it seems like you have so much more to say than "mere" poetry. There's a solid storyline bubbling just beneath the surface here, I think, and it could truly blossom with a little development. A few suggestions: I know you're purposely using sentence fragments, but you could make them a little more choppy and keep the flow moving if instead of "shuddering" you used "shudder" (line 7) so that, instead of sounding as though it is a con...
Poetry / To The Lady of Flies on the Event Horizon
by Montresor
I think both versions have their benefits and downfalls - the first of the two seems to have a free flowing feel to it, whereas the three stanza version is much more structured in traditional style which, though slightly forced, would probably appeal to the masses more. My preference would be the first, more fluid version. It just seems more natural to the piece. I especially enjoy the use of strangely beautiful and rarely used words as descriptors. Nice work!
Poetry / Love Shot
by dragonbite
I enjoy your choppy, eclectic style. I am not sure why you shift from third person to first person directly following the line "The drugs! The drugs!" - I like the third person style better for this piece. Also, the final line seems a bit contrived and dramatic - doesn't really fit with the rest of it. To be honest, I'd lose it entirely and end it with "Beaten into a powder." No exclamation point. A nice starting point, but it still needs a little something to make it sparkle. Keep at it!
Lyrics / Until Further Notice
by nosleepjustdrive4us
"To let us rise back up" - perhaps remove the word "back" - seems unnecessary and disrupts the flow. "We had our head turned" - I'm assuming it should be "heads" not "head?" "The opposit way" - forgot the "e" in opposite :o) "I have the other piece/That fits like a lock to your key - try reworking these lines to keep the flow; perhaps "I have the lock/That was made for your key" "Until further notice is qued" - I'm not sure what this last word is supposed to be, but I think the line would fin...
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