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AGE: 30
LOC: Denver, CO
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: June 10

“If the world revolved around me, I would give every person a lifetime supply of Gummie Bears and Tang!” -GSW

“Face and conquer your demons on the inside, and then share them with the world!”-GSW

“I hope you think I am a terrible writer. Nothing in this world gives me greater pleasure than proving everyone wrong.”-GSW

“My mother had a great deal of trouble with me… I think she liked it!” -Mark Twain

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Short Story / A prophet or a Fool?
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_What is a prophet_? I crossed my feet and rested them against the Plexiglas window that allowed a beautiful view of a parking lot. The word rolled around in my head until it lost meaning, prophet. Was Jesus a prophet, or a man that was in the right place at the right time; or the wrong place at the wrong time? I guess it depends on who you believe he was, a prophet. _He died for our sins; he will come again to judge the living and the dead_. I wonder if he has already come, we probably put h...
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“If grass can grow on the ground, and clouds can fill the sky, what are lightning bugs for?” My papa looked sideways at me and smiled, the wrinkles around his mouth deepened, highlighting his all knowing grin. “I don’t know.” The last of the sun twinkled off of his eyes as he lifted his mason jar to his mouth and emptied half the ice tea down his throat. “Well McGee, they mean something different to everyone, take a look at Johnny and your brother next door.” He said, pointing at the two kids...
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The thin smile of the moon had just slipped behind the dark thunderheads that were rolling in. Jake, my partner lifted the rusted barbed wire and let me pass underneath. I reached the other side and returned the favor. A small grouping of trees covered our hasty entrance into enemy territory. Advancing quietly to the tree line, I flipped the safety of my gun into the off position. I looked to Jake who was also preparing for the most dangerous part of our mission. Our mission objective was cle...
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Short Story / Bipolar Bear: Prologue
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7 Reviews   0 Comments
How many people have you been in your life? In each of those personas, how many things have you done that you don’t want anyone to ever know about? You keep the dark past in the past and you polish your accomplishments for everyone to see, to pat you on the back. You know there are things that the people you try to impress would find unforgivable, unacceptable, and would change their perceptions of you forever. These are the things that you see when you close your eyes, when you are alone wit...
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I stumbled into the disinfected hallway and sat down on the vinyl covered bench. I could see my grandmother pacing back and forth in the glass bubble down at the end of the hallway. My mother was there somewhere along with four other family members that would all look at me with a disgusted eye. I stared at the oddly over lacquered floor trying to make a pattern out of the randomly colored tiles. What am I doing here? I hate hospitals, I haven’s seen most of my family in two years, and I’m s...
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Novel Treatments / Water Dance
Ok the direction it takes at the direction brake is interesting, but truly it raises a whole lot more questions. Which I sappose is good, that way I want to keep reading. One thing I am curious about that really sparks my imagination is, does the ring only turn her into a mermaid, or will it do other things in different situations... anyway. I like the discription of how she is getting used to being under water, I would show you like they say but it is a bit of discription and don't want to a...
Sci Fi & Fantasy / Inheritance of power *Prologue*
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I gotta tell you... this rocks! i've read a lot of pieces her on Urbis and a lot of stories in novel form, and I can only name a handful that has captured my attention and imagination as much as this piece has. My favorite line, and probably the most captivating in my opinion is: _“*The last piece is in place,â it whispered. “Let the play begin*.â_ It brings up so much that is left unanswered and brings forth my curiouosity. What did this poor man walk into? I got a great impression for who J...
Hey check it out I'm back. I liked this continuation of the original piece. I think that there is a lot that is different from the first piece. Part of it is that there is a story line that is more developed than part 1. I like the development of the character, and I enjoy how I get to see the several kevins reflected in the main character. The decision making process of the several is reflected well i his actions. I like how you fill in back story with progressing plot, and how you craft the...
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Wow what a motley crew of the down and dirty. It's funny how you have this coming all together, I expected Ian to be after it for the glory when you first told me about what it was going to be about. Should I call this Ian's 7 instead of Oceans eleven? The only issue I see is that everyone in the crew took Mickey's word for fact although he got himself into this mess, no one said "don't screw this up moron!" or anything. Little typo: “I can get the ids.” Mickey ran a hand over his jaw. Mickey...