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This is good... You have real talent. You have portrayed both characters well. Alexei seems to be a man that would become taxing on the strength of the people around him, I am guessing his wife has to constantly remind him of who she is and where he is every time he wakes up, this may ware thin on the patience of most people. He seems to work more than being at home, this indicates that he either is the main provider of the money of the household or that he enjoys being away from his family. ...

I noticed that you took this part "This is my rifle. This is my gun. This is for killing. This is for fun." from an army movie, I think it was 'Full Metal Jacket'. I like the way that you have picked on a number of types of people instead of one. I like it. I especially like this stanza, "Drive-bys are sticky situations when you can’t tell cum from bullets." it is amusing. Well done and don't stop writing! Yours Truly ^_^Frendly_Bubbles

"I led three lives." "lead" would be a better word than "led" "Then--after breakfast--slipped" "slipping" would be better than "slipped" "still refuses to kiss f.ing flags" Is "f.ing" an abbreviation for a word that isn't very nice or acceptable in modern society, a word that is classed as a swear word? "gets itself in my way." You should put "that" at the start of this line This is an interesting poem. I like it. It was humorous. Other than what I have picked out, this is a very well put poe...

"You won’t ever be able to have any kids, I’m afraid.”" I think that this would be better if it was worded something like this: "I'm afraid that you will never be able to bare children." "around her any longer." "here" not "her" This sounds like a cross between the movie A.I. (Artificial Intelligence) and the story of Hansel and Gretal. Even the names that you have given the 'children' are similar to Hansel and Gretal. There are enough differences between these stories for passable originalit...