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Blarrgh I'm not a fan of haikus in general, so I find a piece about falling in love with them difficult to appreciate.. but I kind of like the way you ask a question and then continue.. though when I first read it, I didn't like it at all, but then it grew on me..

I love it! I really do. -- I think your alliteration is great, it made me want to read it aloud.. but I noticed it right away so I don't know if that means that maybe it's a little forced/obvious at times? But overall I think it really strengthens the piece. -- "Lye" = "lie" and I'm pretty sure that's what you meant, as in "go lie down" though I guess you might be making some odd clever reference to the substance lye and it's just going over my head. --I'm not a fan of the cupid stanza becaus...

Haha I like this mainly because of your "notes for the reader".. But yeah cute, and I like how you didnt go overboard with the spelling "misteaks".

Very interesting and.. bizarre. '“If you could give me anything in the world—anything. What would it be?” She asked.' That should be one sentence: "If you could give me anything in the world -- anything--, what would it be?" she asked. "Her high heels ached her feet; she kicked them off." I don't think anything can ache something else -- intransitive verb, I think. I'd change that to: "Her high heels made her feet ache; she kicked them off." But yeah, very nice.