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AGE: 24
LOC: Emmett, ID
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: August 28

I sing, write, draw, and act and love interacting with other creative people. I like to hang out with my friends, and playing video games on the weekends. I love music and enjoy cuddling up with a good book on cold days.

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Poetry / The Maze
Version 1
3 Reviews   1 Comment
It's all a maze Through thick 'n thin. So long, So long it'll never end. Still somehow you know it's all connected. A tunnel here, the pathway there On and on so full of care. And at the end, A prize worth keeping. The treasure to keep, but not to touch. Something worth seeing. In the heart to hold with A hand to share This beauty untold.
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Poetry / Is It Worth It,
Version 1
3 Reviews   1 Comment
Is It Worth It? Sitting here friendless, My heart, as dry as the dust that Puffs about the weary traveler's feet. I wonder. Is it worth it, This world of pain and hate? Somewhere is there something better than this heavy load I bear Knowing that noone truly cares?   Red On White          When you're born you're white,Pure. No matter how you look White. But then you learn, you grow Red, And as you grow you come to know Life. You're not ...
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Poetry / Invisible Soul
Version 1
3 Reviews   0 Comments
She walks with a smile, Yet you can see there's Something Hiding behind the bouncing presence And laugh that comae and go Lightning quick. Strange, she smiles yet, There it goes! Just a flicker, but it's Different; striking, And suddenly you see. That lightning strike and Flicker of flame, Are only meant to Draw attention From the tears that fall behind The Mask.
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Poetry / Hopeless
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3 Reviews   0 Comments
Thoughts, Emotions, Shadows of the past Swirling black and grey. No white, No end, Longing for escape. No smiles, no laughing. Dizzy, Numb, No more tears Sparkeling on my cheek In the moonlight. No singing, No music, Loneliness,dispare, Sadness, cold. I lond for escape from a world without hope. Thoughts,emotions, Shadows of the past, swirling black and grey.
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Poetry / Death,
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3 Reviews   1 Comment
The room is dark and still, Silent but for my heart. Velvet black surrounds me, And I taste the silence-- Mmmmm . . . bittersweet. I can hear my heart. Be still--quiet your pounding beat. It fades away, and all that's left Is velvet darkness and bittersweet silence. It surrounds and swallows me, Whisking me away forever.
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Poetry / Back Stabber
by Anonymous
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Short Story / Thanksgiving
by derekosborne
OK, first, there is some serious copy editing needed here. I've pointed out some of the more obvious things that need fixed and made appropriate suggestions: His brother-in-law’s family was loud and could be difficult at times. Without them, Frank, his sister’s husband, would sequester himself in the den on his Lazy-Boy, switching from NASCAR to football all day. -This has and awkward flow, and sounds redundant. Here's a way to clean it up a bit: His brother-in-law's family was loud and could...
Sci Fi & Fantasy / mind freaks
by patricstar1986
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Remarkable-1-5
by FrakKevin
Ok, I won't critique the spellin/grammar since you haven't proofread it yet. Those things aside, this is a great start. The characters and quirky take interested me and kept me reading. I look forward to seeing the rest of this one!
Flash Fiction / Willy D
by derekosborne
I thought this was a little bit long for a flash fiction, but the story is magnificent. The depth of understanding here is great. Good work, and good luck with this piece!
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