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AGE: 26
LOC: Ashland, PA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: July 10

I get most of my inspiration from my personal life. This is because all the people that I know are crazies pretending to be normal. I love them very much.

I studied Photography, Illustration, and English in college. Currently I am working on several interrelated projects. I tend to have a body of different mediums as opposed to just writing. This way I can let it take me over, and really get to the meat of the matter.

I am dyslexic, and I have ADHD, which makes for some killer typos unless I pay very, very close attention. Bit of a pickle, it is.

I am a very, very, very critical reader. I am not easily impressed, but when I am so, I do not hesitate to give praise. I do not believe in criticism that is not constructive. If it is …

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17 Reviews   3 Comments
I dust the apples at work. It baffles my coworkers. I use a paper towel, damp with water, to buff each one to a shine. We usually only carry four or five of them -- truckers aren't partial to fruit. Don cannot stand this. Everytime he sees me walking toward the black metal basket that holds them he gasps and cries out like a theater actor. With one arm extended toward me in an unreaching grasp he will cry "The apples! Why, why do you insist upon wasting your time?" It's just that they're pra...
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Haiku/Senryu / Lunar Murder
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10 Reviews   0 Comments
Every twenty-eight, I am flushing life away in little cotton caskets.
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Version 1
9 Reviews   0 Comments
I dust the apples at work. It baffles my coworkers. I use a paper towel, damp with water, to buff each one to a shine. We usually only carry four or five of them -- truckers aren't partial to fruit. Don cannot stand this. Everytime he sees me walking toward the black metal basket that holds them he gasps and cries out like a theater actor. With one arm extended toward me in an unreaching grasp he will cry "The apples! Why, why do you insist upon wasting your time?" It's just that they're pra...
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Poetry / To Jessica
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3 Reviews   0 Comments
There, he would make a good husband the children could be little rosebuds they would make the other mothers jealous. Well they tell us that by thirty our tubes bust. So, hurry up it will be fantastic to find a man to fill us up with plastic. You will have a little girl and she can wed my Yale-bred son. At baseball games on Tuesday afternoons we can tell each other about vacations in Hawaii and compare our beach front property. Someday youll forget me, and all those nights tied up in sheets. Y...
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17 Reviews   1 Comment
He sits on the very edge of the bed, as if he is about to stand and leave. I bite the inside of my cheek with anticipation. I am afraid to touch him, for fear he might be cold. My hands will not stay off of my stomach. It is as though there is a magnet in my abdomen. There is a permanent bruise on his right cheek, extending from nose to jawline, the size of an apple. I will never be able to tear the image from my mind. He sees me staring at it and turns his face to profile. "Why do you bothe...
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Haiku/Senryu / AUTUMN
I like this, but the formatting is incorrect. A haiku is five syllables, seven, and then five. Play out this idea -- nice start! PS - If you want to read more about them try this link: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Haiku
Young Adult / Alison
As you stated in your comments, you do need to work on spelling and grammar. They are very important in writing, and when you send your work to an editor in the hopes of publishing, it has to be perfect. You have a knack for story-telling, this is apparent. I think the best thing for you to do would be to read, read, read. Reading as many books of as many varieties as possible will help you make leaps and bounds on your own writing. It is also handy to get a pocket grammar guide (Strunk & Whi...
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Alright, this was a very long piece, and I must admit that I found it a fair bit flawed. I understand what you are trying to do, and that you want to create a unique piece. However, in the world of publishing, if you are going to do something that usually isn't done (format-wise), it really has to be perfect. I imagine that you are positing it so that you can get there, so here are my pointers: MANY of the rhymes are predictable. Poetry doesn't always have to rhyme, and when it does, you shou...
I absolutely loved the first sentence, it got my attention immediately. The description of the paint smell was done well, it made you feel as though I were actually in the room. I think more of that sight/smell decription in the first part might be nice. Overall there is a lot of stregnth in your dialouge as well. I'm not sure 'shock value' is what you were aiming for here, but I was definitely suprised by where it went. The end particularly made me raise my eyebrows. This, to me, seems like ...
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