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AGE:
40
LOC: Honeoye Falls, NY
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: August 27
LOC: Honeoye Falls, NY
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: August 27
Born and raised in New York State, Daniel Leigh Carter currently resides with his wife in Western New York. Growing up Daniel enjoyed Sci-Fi and Fantasy stories. Some of his favorite authors include, Robert Aspirin and Stephen R. Donaldson. Having acted in plays, such as Diary of Anne Frank and Damn Yankees, Daniel soon turned to writing skits and short plays as well as directing. Having studied at Elim Bible Institute and Hudson Valley Bible School, the desire to blend fantasy and faith had driven him to begin a journey on finding a story that would do just that. The Unwanted is his first full-length novel in a trilogy that opens up a new world of Sci-fi and Fantasy that appeals to many ages.
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Chapter 2: Escape (July 17th 2007. Poughkeepsie, NY 14 Months after the Chicago murders) Once again Janet found herself hitting the hard pavement and for a moment breathing eluded her. Several defining explosions rocked the pavement underneath of her as section by section the building behind her spewed out debris in every direction. Finally Janet inhaled sharply followed by coughing from the thick smoke in the air. The almost paralyzing pain in her ribs made it even more difficult for her to ...
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Verse 1: The clouds were black, Day turned to night The rumbling of the thunder, the valley was a sight I knew a battle was near... The two armies, began to rise up They stood fact to face, the good and the corrupt The time has come, the time has come... Chorus: There's a battle in the valley so turn and fight, Before you loose your own life... Verse 2: The armies marched forward, weapons held high The air filled, with battle cries The end has come... The clashing of the armies, filled the sk...
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Chapter 1: Nightclub Nick slipped two one hundred dollar bills into the doorman’s hand as he cautiously entered the nightclub. The crowd was in full party mode. The large crowd of men and women engaging each other rhythmically on the dance floor along with the thumping bass from the live band made it difficult for Nick to concentrate. Purposefully he adjusted his $3000 suit and took a deep breath to calm himself. All his clothes felt tight around his broad shoulders and he cursed under his br...
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Nick slipped two one hundred dollar bills into the doorman’s hand as he cautiously entered the nightclub. The crowd was in full party mode. He couldn’t help but notice the large crowd of men and women engaging each other rhythmically on the dance floor as he endured the pain in his ears caused by the thumping bass coming from the live band up on stage. Purposefully he adjusted his Armani suit and took a deep breath to calm himself. He was meeting someone tonight and he knew how important it w...
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“This is Journeyman-8 log entry day 92.” I sat back in my seat and tried to relax. “It has now been over three months that I have been alone in this shuttle and I have traveled nearly 200 years into the future. For the first time in man’s history the speed of light has been broken and from what the readings on my control panel are telling me I should be able to see Earth in a matter of minutes. If this goes as planned I should be able to take the readings I need from Earth’s orbit and begin m...
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All I have to say is good job. You've allowed the reader to get into the world of this boy and the life of slavery he leads. I also liked that you have created an anxiety to the chapter that gets the reader hooked and asking questions. I got lost a little while the boy was running around. That part wasn't as clear as I would have liked but I was able to pick up later what was happening. Good job overall and I look forward to reading more in the future.
OK the good first. You are very intune with the characters feelings and you have a distinctive fragmented writing style which can be very good. Also your use of description and emotion is nice. Good job and I would say you definitely have talent. OK some critique. A little too fragmented in your thoughts has caused me as a reader to get lost and question what is happening. I feel you need to give a clearer setting as to what is happening and not so much on the character's emotions. The emotio...
If you were going for gross and depressing then you definitely accomplished it. Not sure the "Walls covered in gore" quite goes with this. I think more interesting may have been to say "Scratch marked walls" but that's just me.
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