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LOC: United Kingdom
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LAST LOGIN: October 10
Standing my ground and testing the water
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2. ANGELS, WE HAVE HEARD. I'm all in a spin. It's all happened so quickly and I can't seem to believe it. That you're not here anymore. If only I'd ... if only ... but it's no use, you see, and it's all happened so quickly. so strangely, I don't know what to think, can't even ... If I'd known. I'd have been better. Oh yes. But you knew that, didn't you ? And here I am, on a pew, mumbling faces all around me, and what did you ever get from it ? What was it ever worth ? Me on a pew, and you out...
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THE IMITATION PART ONE : INTROIT 1. MORNING HAS BROKEN Everyone who met Dominic Davenport knew him as a happy man. He had a job he enjoyed, he loved his wife, and he and Jenni were expecting their first child. She was blossoming towards the due date with few, if any, problems, and their generally unruffled relationship was a great source of support and of joy. If it could be said of anyone, it was true of Dominic : his life had everything a person could want. Dominic was aware of all this, to...
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After we’d talked, and kissed, in the park My evening teemed with cookery. First, the functional: a stir-fry, Green leeks sizzling, the headiness of coriander, Sloshed with a rich-brewed shoyu sauce And served up on its steamy bed of rice. Having fed my family, my thoughts ran free. My wife went out, and the children slept in bed. To the turbulent music of the dishwasher And a burble of Mozart from the front room, First came the beetroot: peeling off its jacket, Wrinkled and dusted grey with ...
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Farm news At 6 a.m. Introduces our guest: “National Pig Executive.” Oh wow!
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A really very beautiful, well executed and Romantic [in the true sense] poem. I love the subtle ways you have used personification, and combined that with the specific characteristics of plants [especially that last line]. I shall read again, as there are no doubt depths I will have missed on a first read. One for the favourites, I think.
Yeah, think this one works ... but it seems like something I've read before? Either that means you have created something with a wide appeal, or you have tapped into something which is already out there. Who cares? Like I said, it works.
Because of the circumstances of your poem, I find it particularly hard to judge this piece of work by any of the usual criteria. You have made your feelings clear, and I hope in some small way that sharing this will help you mark your loss, and that there will be others - like me - who will wish you well at such a time.
Very euphonic, and it may well be true of you as an artist, but I feel that it's a slightly narrow definition of an artist if meant to apply more widely. And isn't 'sensitive senses' something of a tautology? You get my points for the sheer music and bravado of your statement!
I started off thinking that I wouldn't like this, but as I read on its mock-cynicism, humour and energy grabbed me. I love the sense of chaos and panic, and the line about "Big eyes and a toothless smile/ Like an old Hobo" are fabulous, credible and grotesque. It is rare to see something so utterly without sentimentality: a crazy-but-true cartoon poem.
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