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AGE: 26
LOC: Colorado Springs, CO
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: September 04

I’m native Coloradoan. I love writing, reading, photography, art, anything outdoors, philosophy (not to study, just for living), martial arts, and most of all, helping people. I WOULD RATHER BE HURT BY THE TRUTH THAN COMFORTED WITH A LIE! Be who you are and say how you feel, because those who mind don’t matter and those who matter don’t mind. Anything else, just ask, or ask to see my other profiles.

                                                                                                                          

The Invitation

It does not interest me what you do for a living. I want to know what you ache for, and if you dare to dream your heart’s longing.
It does not interest me how old you are. I want to know if …

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Chapter 13 Acquisition They’d wandered the wold for several fortnights in search of the item their master demanded that they retrieve for him. If they returned empty-handed, he had warned, they might as well not have returned at all. One creature wore the form of an oversized ogre, the other a troll. Both appeared as though they were bred from a giant, and the species’ of which they resembled. But neither assumption would be true. This pair was created, not bred. Their physical form was a mer...
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Chapter 12 Searchlight They passed all the signs of Rahmina’s battle; broken, bloodied and burnt arrows amongst the patches of burnt grass. They were relieved to see there was no human corpses littering the ground, yet at the same time were worried that there were no corpses at all. It was obvious whoever fought the creatures didn’t know what they were up against, and were forced to flee. Secile decided they couldn’t afford to stop for a break, so they reached Tuntiload shortly after dark due...
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Chapter 11 Pawns Neeka waited for dawn to attempt solving the mystery shrouding her memory. This was obviously not just an average bully. There was magic involved; something she knew next to nothing about. But when she thought about it, she must go alone. If harm befell one of her friends simply because she wanted them to help her, she would hide away from the world for all eternity for fear of being catalyst to another tragedy. No, she would face this demon by herself. She’d explored a decen...
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Chapter 10 Shadow Thief They’d ridden hard the whole day since leaving the valley that morning, and the sun now loomed just below the horizon as they reached the gates of Tuntiload. Captain Sash Laurdien, flanked by two guards on each side, rode out to meet the entourage. “Greetings, General!” “Well met, Captain,” Rahmina replied, pulling ahead of Kainis and Randal. “That was a short stay in the north. You visit the valley?” Rahmina noted the poorly masked hint of worry in his expression. “Ay...
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Chapter 9 Farewell She couldn’t believe how well she slept! And her dream: so detailed and full of images of her mother. She believed the events of her dream were accurate, despite that some took place before her birth. It was as if her mother’s spirit was with her throughout the night, showing her the life she lived that had been kept hidden from Kaia-mei: her studies in Nimbdell and her travels before that, her accomplishments and philosophies of life. Kaia-mei believed she even witnessed h...
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I can't believe you spent all that time adding those rankings... I can't believe I spent all that time filling them out! This "piece" definitely was amusing, so it fits all the categories of making one laugh or smile or boggle over some nebulous concept... I don't see how it could be even considered for publication in any genre, or anything related to attracting an agent. Unless, perhaps, they're looking for someone with unique spontenuity. It's definitely original! I doubt anyone has ever su...
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I knew it was a dream! :) And glad it was, too ;p "...sending a sweet cherry like scent into the air..." -- cherry-like, but are you sure even that is appropriate? Perhaps just "a scent similar to cherry" ..."entering your dreams. By doing so, he has revealed himself to us." -- How? Because they now know what he looks like? Where he is? Both? Or did it confirm his existence and intentions, rather than just some prophecy? "I think I know where that answer to that question be." -- Did you mean ...
Short Story / Cut
I'm not convinced their relationship is empty. From my perspective, they are eccentric in demeanor as well as their interactions. You paint them as troubled, each in different ways, which seemingly brought them together. If you insist their realtionship is empty, I think it works for the story. They are more the type to thrive on the other's lack of enthusiasm for life (Fiona with her growth abnormality, and the narrator with his dissolving health) than to build each other toward rich and col...
Flash Fiction / Rebel
Wonderful! Nice play on the "think outside the box" concept :) You express how sometimes in life you just need to go against the flow. Well done :) The only suggestions I'd have is maybe you could play with the punctuation and sentence structure a bit, of course keep the exact wording :)
Moving along nicely. I feel the quest coming up soon :) “On the contrary, it is you that don’t want to get on my bad side." -- you who doesn't want to, unless that terminology is part of her character. We haven't read much about Martika or much with her speaking anyway, so maybe I just don't quite have a full grasp of how her speech would form and how it would sound. "...or I can assure you that whatever he has threatened to do to you, what I will do to you, will be ten times worse.” -- A lit...