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AGE: 28
LOC: Colorado Springs, CO
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: October 26

Greetings, travelers!

Positive and healthy; I love helping others to see the creative and productive side of life.

Honesty. Integrity. Creating values for self, others and the world’s future.

I would rather be hurt by the truth than comforted with a lie.

Please read an excerpt of my first published Fantasy novel, the beginning of a trilgoy, at Xlibris.com: go to the “bookstore” tab, in the book search enter 66253 (my book ID #).

My novel is called The Shadow of Chea’Laern under the name J.T. Welch.

Thank you and Farewell!

~ Dexus

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Secile Shuriek is asked to find her friend’s daughter who was sent to an eastern valley shortly after birth. Secile accepts, even though she was about to start her graduation quest to become a Master; to find the artifact called Vaulinque-litaya and bring it to Nimbdell. Vaulinque-litaya is a sentient dagger. When Vaulinque-litaya pierces a living creature through the heart, it instantly drains the blood from them and replaces the blood with its seed, which rebirths the victim as a powe...
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  Secile Shuriek is asked to find her friend’s daughter who was sent to an eastern valley shortly after birth. Secile accepts, even though she was about to start her graduation quest to become a Master; to find the artifact called Vaulinque-litaya and bring it to Nimbdell. Vaulinque-litaya is a sentient dagger. When Vaulinque-litaya pierces a living creature through the heart, it instantly drains the blood from them and replaces the blood with its seed, which rebirths the victim as...
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  Dear ;   If the safety of the region is at stake, I believe there would be more people involved than just a handful of main characters. Many people would try to take part in some way, even if they are not connected with the main characters. The Shadow of Chea’Laern is a completed 131,000 word Sword and Sorcery Fantasy; the first book of a trilogy. In my novel, magic is metaphysical; energy based, sourced from the energy of one’s soul. Anyone can find their magic since ...
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  Chapter 3   Gathering the Pieces A scowling woman stood in front of five score men in the hot midmorning sun. Some were new to her brigade, but most had familiar faces. Her piercing gray eyes roamed from one soldier to the next, up and down the lines and back again, withering each of them with her solid, intense gaze. Even as those cold eyes passed over the only two men in the entire army whom she trusted with her life, mercy was not evident. She stood a few inches less than six ...
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  Chapter 2   Shattered Brinney’s frequent nervous glances over her shoulder as they headed back to the village did not evade Caize’s peripheral vision. Knowing his sister’s agitations when no apparent danger was present meant something was amiss, he stopped to question her. “Brin, is something wrong?” She remained silent, her eyes glued to the ground. “What is it? You can tell me.” She looked up to him. “But you scare, like Mother s...
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He slid behind her wrapped his arms around her. -- and “What are you talking about?” -- When she says she knows how to defeat the master, it doesn't seem to me that Mikel would say this. Consider adding some action or body language or imply some thought and maybe say something like "How?" or "What is your plan?" The way it is now makes it sound like Mikel thinks Lauriana wouldn't know what she's talking about. I like the play on strength in love/togetherness :) "After wizard left and elven wo...
"He’d had it carved on the spot from a large piece of obsidian" -- this isn't as clear as it could be. Consider specifying that it was carved in THAT room? Does she feel anything, fear or anxiety, at seeing her party trapped on the other side of the shield? I like the surprise twist in the meeting with Zotara and Andries, and the warrior's outfit :) "she only needed to figure how who was her" typo? "Zeke’s eyebrows rose as her turned to Ash." -- as HE turned to Ash? "“I just might have a few ...
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For some reason I couldn't click next page. I tried refreshing the page and it still wouldn't work. I could only read page 1. So far it definitely is surreal and abstract! I enjoyed the sense of freedom it seems to paint. It reminds me of The Beatles! :) Well done!
"Hmmm, Zeke thought," -- Hmm seems more like something someone would say rather than think. A vocal "hmm" usually implies thought, but I don't recall ever actually THINKING the "hmm." Thinking back, I don't recall many instances where you described show of magic. The only one I could think of before now was the Master's fireball fight. I enjoyed Zeke's display of power. Perhaps you could add a few other magic shows before this one besides burning handprints and healing. "Zeke waved of his han...
So the Master is still very unlikeable :) “There’s got to be away.” -- a way "The look of terror in her eyes melted in to warm," -- melted away to / melted to? "Tandril entered the shelter partway carrying a cup tea" -- teacup? cup of tea? The Master can't return to her unless she is alone? Is this because he wouldn't want to deal with anyone else? Or is it because of a limitation on his magic? This should be specified. “No, but I thought perhaps you had since you have yet to mention it the o...