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AGE:
41
LOC: Phoenix, AZ
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: April 24
LOC: Phoenix, AZ
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: April 24
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Living on the street Thinking on his feet Living in a van Surviving the best that he can Avoiding the upper crust No one to talk to no one to trust
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Into the darkness of the night, I find myself in pain, I have just been beaten in a fight, Nothing to lose and nothing to gain, Now I lay on the ground, Screaming seeking help from anyone, I have lost a crown, Blood is all over and I'm hoping they are done, I have lost my sight, I am in serious pain, I'd rather not have been in this fight, I must have been insane, I guess this was your turf, How was I to have known, I will like the tide move me on into another surf, Now that I have died a tre...
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Traffic sprawling, Leap frogging, Losing patience, Distractions, disasterous disasters, Being vocal, Venting out, Tired yawning, Radio playing music, Horns blowing, Beep beep beep beep, Debris flying, Trash scattered, Littered right of ways, Visable accidents, Waitning to happen, Rush hour traffic, The heat is on, Inside and outside, The vehicles, Stop and go, Dead ass traffic, Drives one nuts, Thoughts and ideas, Travel my brainwaves, Looking around Wow, The landscape is, Just wonderful, Tim...
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My soul is circled by nothing My sight favors that Reclusion excites me I'm all spent on java Talking about life. Hidden above dark clouds It is easy to do Being the fallen fool Over and over This is what I know and this is what I do! Getting over you I know I'll be the fool But, finding someone new That's hard to do Tossing and turning endlessly! Nothing seemed to get in the captains way Never ever not yesterday or today Onward we must sail Leave them rotten no goods behind As they treated y...
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Darkness for a moment Do you feel lucky? Maybe for a moment Wait until I clentch onto your scent! I am the one who finnally gets you In your home, at your place of employment I am smiling waiting waiting for you in the vent. And I will even clentch onto the Unsuspecting person nearby walking a dog. I can not wait any longer As grotesque as I am, you are mine. How does it feel knowing you're Being stalked and to think You stalked me when I Was just a jogger. How bizzarre! Don't cha think! Welc...
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This is an interesting poem. I can see it with some artwork in a childrens book sitting on a Barnes and Noble shelf. I say bravo. Now write another and yet another for us to read.
I like it as it displays an emotional lover. One thing you might consider is turning this into a song.
This is so fitting in these times that we are in today. Just do a spell check,otherwise it is a fine work of art.
This poem weaves in and out. It rhymes and then it becomes lost. I like the word usage and understand your meaning very well. I'd work on maintaining one style or theme in the same piece. otherwise a great work of art. Keep on writing.
This poem needs some work as to what style you want to maintain. I like your word usage,however, the pretext is mixed up a bit in terms of the tone. One might cosider adding more imagery. Be more descriptive. Otherwise a wonderful effort. Keep on writing and reading and you'll be fine.
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