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AGE:
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LOC: Paradise, CA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: December 21
LOC: Paradise, CA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: December 21
I am an artist of all kinds. Sketching, painting, music, writing, theater, i love it all! I’ve been working on this book for 5 years. It’s a trilogy, and I’m nervous to put it out there to be critiqued, but here ya go.
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CH1 I hear her. She doesn’t know, but I can hear and feel every fiber of her being, as she shakes with grief and sadness. I can’t see her of course, being about two miles north of her. Her screams throb in my brain and my heart is heavy in my chest. I’m not sure why she is crying and so depressed. I have never been good at understanding why people feel what they feel, it is hard to tell when so many different things can bring up the same emotion, and I can only feel what th...
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CH1 I hear her. She doesn’t know, but I can hear and feel every fiber of her being as she shakes with grief and sadness. I can’t see her of course, being about two miles north of her. Her screams throb in my brain and my heart is heavy in my chest. I’m not sure why she is crying and so depressed. I have never been good at understanding why people feel what they feel, it is hard to tell when so many different things can bring up the same emotion, and I can only feel what the...
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this is a beautiful poem, one that most can relate to. I really want to point out how the title is perfect for the poem! beautifull job!
I love how you begin it..then it seems to turn into a chant. That was a lot you aid in such few words though.
this was so very touching. absolutely beautiful. bravo, absolutely fantastic. all i can say is i hope some one with some power finds your work. good job.
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